Tuesday, February 26, 2013

Sea of Dreams for dVerse Feb. 26, 2013



Sea of Dreams!

You and I in a sea of dreams
night  cries in the wind
bed of clouds, wispy thin
starlight in our eyes

sing to me in harmony
under the solar flares
of my inner dreams
I now lay my soul bare

blanket me with melodies
soft as the velvet sky
your voice, rich and sweet
tucking me in to sleep

slowly reaching for you
touching your face
just one kiss from thy lips
a dream within a dream

eyelids heavy,  swimming
on the waves of emotions
we gently rock and sway
songs  of devotions

You and I in a sea of dreams
voices sigh in the wind
misty sprays of passion
love everlasting..

32 comments:

  1. This is a passionate voice ~ I specially like these lines:

    blanket me with melodies
    soft as the velvet sky
    your voice, rich and sweet
    tucking me in to sleep

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  2. a sea of dreams does not sound like a bad place at all...love the sing over me melodies....like a lullaby of love to take me to sleep and to dream even deeper...smiles.

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    1. Hi Brian,

      Thanks for the nice comment..like a lullaby of love..I like that line..thanks again..

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  3. Sounds like a softly, cradling place that sea of dreams...lulling, singing, joining...beautiful.

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    1. Thanks so much for the comment. The water always gives me a sense of comfort and a topic that touches me.

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  4. eyelids heavy, swimming
    on the waves of emotions
    we gently rock and sway
    songs of devotions.....dreamy and beautiful write.

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    1. ayala, thanks so much for the kind comment.

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  5. A soft sweetness to this writing. Vunerable.

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    1. Thank you for reading my work!

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  6. This is a beautiful and romantic poem. I love 'a dream within a dream.'

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  7. You have that gift of taking a reader right (ZIP!) into your "dream world". Nicely constructed and well-written. I enjoy discovering rhyming words of which each are NOT in their traditional end-of-line cushy spot. E.g., in first stanza: night, starlight...and cries, eyes.

    Glad you dropped by Fourth Dimension, get to read a Peep new to me!

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    1. Hi Steve, So nice of you to drop in and leave such a nice comment. I am a bit unconventional in my writing but, it works for me and I am so glad you enjoyed my arrangement.

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  8. nice..this has a dreamy feel...blanket me with melodies...hmmm..nice..melodies are wonderful blankets, arent they..

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    1. Claudia, Always nice to see you here. Thanks!

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  9. nice. I like this lullaby/lyrical vibe here. Really nice choices to effectively deliver the metaphors and imagery. Nicely done. Thanks

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    1. Hi Fred, I am glad you could pick up on the lyrical vibe as I originally wrote this with a song in mind. I hear the melody playing in my head. Again thanks!

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  10. To be lost in such a sea, sounds great to me. Like the atmosphere you set too.

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    1. Hi, Thanks for stopping in lost at sea is a great place to be.

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  11. Beautiful write! I especially enjoyed the last stanza!

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    1. Hello,

      Thanks for the nice comment! Always appreciated.

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  12. Beautifully written piece about the comfort of love and dreaming alongside your loved one. Well, that is how I interpreted it. Thanks for visiting and commenting on mine.

    Pamela

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    1. Thank you and yes, I do enjoy a good dream or should I say a dream inside a dream. You are welcomed I enjoyed your work.

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  13. The melody and rhythm here in these passages are reminiscent of a song.

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    1. Hello,

      I am happy you could feel the song quality as it really is a song in my heart and always will be. Thanks so much!

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  14. There is a rhythm to this that rocks like a boat-- I sense a sway as I "sing" the words--no, in fact, I am actually swaying in my chair! Nice evocative dream! ~ Jason

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    1. Hello,

      Thanks so much for your kind words..glad you could feel the sways.

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  15. Dreamy. The swell of words carries you along like a melody.

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    1. Mark,

      Thanks so much for your kind expressions of my work! Nice to meet you..

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