Thursday, April 4, 2013

Thursday April 4, 2014 imaginary garden with real toads




Justin Timberlake - I've got soul but, I'm not a soldier


End of the World

Man, thinks he holds the world
drifting through life livin' on the edge
drink for the soul in an aluminum can
makin' a promise , a silent pledge

watch your back, he's got a gun
from here to there without a care
walkin'  under  a blazing  sun
playin' the game of life on a dare

arcade of temptation, grab a token
ooh, that babe is lookin' nice
body's talkin' no words spoken
c' mon  now give me a slice

no boundaries,  what's  right
soldiers playing war call of duty
fighting the battle for lost souls
chasing darkness, seeking  beauty

fallin' on drunken knees, bruised
can someone buy me another one
I've got a soul but  it's  confused
singing a song until the day is done

end of the world not so amusing
salvation found in an aluminum can
who will be winning, who will be losing
I've got soul, but I'm not a soldier..
I'm part of creation - man

Author's note:  This was a prompt
THE CHALLENGE:
Watch the clip.
Write a poem inspired by it.
That's pretty much it.

20 comments:

  1. Nice play on having soul, can sure take its toll and being part of it all, surely can be seen on your wall.

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    1. Hi Pat,

      Nice to see you on my wall. A nice prompt so I had to see what could be done.

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  2. Oh yes, the world and salvation, both in an aluminum can. Well done!
    K

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  3. Good take on the prompt, strong rhyme and rhythm in this. I especially like your lines:


    fallin' on drunken knees, bruised
    can someone buy me another one
    I've got a soul but it's confused
    singing a song until the day is done

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    1. Hi Mary,

      Thanks so much for the kind reply. I'm glad you enjoyed my take.

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  4. nice...really like your cadence in this...it comes across very lyrical with the rhyme and rhythm...a little bit of testosterone going on in this...smiles.

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    1. Hi Brian,

      Thanks for the comment it was a bit of fun to write.

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  5. This is really good! Wonderful write!

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    1. Charles,

      Thanks for read and reply. Always nice!

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  6. what i like the most here is the stream of consciousness which you have captured. You built a depthful character and charged him with intensity. Well done and viva la

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    1. Isadora,

      Thank you so much for the kind assessment. I'm glad you stopped in to read.

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  7. Yes, indeed, sometimes the contents of that aluminum can make one think one is invincible indeed. Loved 'arcade of temptation' and 'salvation found in an aluminum can.' Well penned!

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    1. Mary,

      Thanks for stopping by and the reply. The arcade of life always something happening.

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  8. To me this reads like the lyrics to a great song!

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    1. Kerry,

      Thank you so much for feeling the lyrical side of the piece.

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  9. A different voice from you ~ Very nice and like Kerry, I thought it flows like a song ~

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    1. Grace,

      Thanks, this just flowed rather freely..nice to experiment with different textures.

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  10. chasing darkness, seeking beauty
    fallin' on drunken knees, bruised

    A poetic story... too often true. Nicely done and like the attention to rhyme.

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    1. Margaret,

      Thank you so much for reading and the reply!

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