Friday, June 21, 2013

dVerse - Sedoka Prompt - Eclipse

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haunting melodies
float free in a velvet sky
your songs echo in my soul

eclipse of my heart
softly swaying to the beat
surrendering to desire




26 comments:

  1. of course i am now humming total eclipse of the heart...ha...songs that echo in your soul...those are def the good ones....surrender away...smiles.

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    1. Hi Brian,

      Too funny now we will be singing that song all night..thanks for the comment..

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  2. This is beautiful. It floats like a dream Truedessa.

    typo in your title? Elcipse... I just did that the other day in one of mine...

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    1. Hello,

      Thanks for the lovely comment and also for the heads up. I just fixed it:)

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  3. I'm amazed how the sedoka can be transfigured so that it can fit a myriad of poetic styles, from the public to the personal. Here, for example, is one where it's made intensely personal.

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    1. Thank you for visiting and the comment. The prompt was interesting and fun to do..thank you for that inspiration.

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  4. Such a song
    Can do no wrong
    Just let it flow
    And away you'll go
    To where I don't know
    Just don't stub your toe
    Or whack your elbow
    Maybe a lawn you'll mow

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    1. Hi Pat,

      Do you care
      to sing-a-long
      we could sing
      all day long..

      always a pleasure
      to have you as a guest
      at my house..(smiling)


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    2. I can try
      But away you may fly
      As I can't carry a tune in a bucket
      But I say err umm duck it

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    3. We can be two out of tune
      just singing the day away
      would be fun to do.

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  5. The first katuata reminded me of the beautiful ancient idea that the movement of the planets and stars created harmonic tones, the musica universalis. And then, moving into the harmonic tones of the heart in love--lovely!

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    1. Nico,

      Thanks you so much..what a lovely comment..I am moved by your words.

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  6. Smooth, sultry feel to this. Love it.

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    1. Hello,

      Thank you for the lovely note. Hope you have a lovely day..

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  7. Like Samuel said, this form seems very well suited to a multitude of styles. This worked wonderfully. Great write! -Mike

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    1. Mike,

      Thank you for the visiting and the thoughtful comment.

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  8. smiles...made the song total eclipse of the heart come to my mind... love the musical quality of your verse and the images work so well

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    1. Claudia,

      Good Morning, thank you for feeling the music.

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    1. Hi Paige,

      Thank you so much for the return visit.

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  10. Lovely romantic, sensual touch to this well-written sedoka, Truedessa.

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    1. Thanks for visiting and the lovely comment Victoria. I hope you have a beautiful day.

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  11. I feel the desire.Nice sedoka.

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    1. Thank you for the read and comment.

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  12. Wonderful in both symbolic and romantic ;-)

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    1. Hello again,

      Thank you for your wonderful words :)

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