Thursday, August 29, 2013

Passing Place



one lane , bittersweet  passing place
pulling over,  shoulder of life
stargazing in a world of space
one lane, bittersweet passing place
changing lanes two lovers embrace
wandering souls float free from strife
one lane, bittersweet passing place
pulling over, shoulder of life

written for the Mag 183

20 comments:

  1. #1 for me
    Yippeeee
    And such an embrace
    Would make a heart race
    One lane but a change
    When another comes in range
    Finding it to be bittersweet
    Quite the treat

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    1. # 1 is alright by me
      I'm smiling with glee
      as I sip my herb tea
      under a palm tree..

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    2. You moved to some place warm
      Now there may be a **** storm
      You did not tell me
      How rude of thee lol

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    3. lol I did not move to a warmer place
      still here stuck in this place..

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  2. Well written.

    Your profile could run parallel to me.

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    1. Thank you Gail for the comment and the visit.

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  3. really like the repetition line...its got a cool rhythm to it...the lovers embrace and others floating free is cool too...

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    1. Good Afternoon Brian,

      Thanks for the nice comment..tempted a Triolet poem..lol..tricky one to do but, I like the outcome of the poem.

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  4. Nicely penned...but I am wondering if it is not a little dangerous for two lovers to embrace right there! Smiles.

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    1. Hi Mary,

      Perhaps, they like to live on the edge..happy birthday!

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  5. Driving & love....a exciting ride I say!

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  6. 'Tis better to pass than crash--huh?

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  7. Wonderful pic that one can imagine, together with the rhyming! Nicely Trudessa!

    Hank

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    1. Hank,

      Thanks so much my friend glad to see you here.

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  8. I like the rhythm of your poem. It read like a song. :-)

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    1. Thank you so much for the visit and lovely reply. I'm glad you could hear the music.

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