Thursday, February 13, 2014

Dreams like Pennies in a Jar



Under moonlit sky we go for a drive
radio playing, sitting side by side
shimmering stars, a few clouds in the night
weatherman said it would rain but,  he lied
love I give to you free, keep your wage
dreams like pennies in a jar I have saved
woven memories, stitched by hand I made
remove your mask, I long to see your face
lovingly we embrace, our wounds we nurse
healing, within our spiritual church
finding sweet bliss, to deny  would be worse
forgiveness,  deposits in our soul's purse

sighing, lightening life's load from our back
true love tattooed, we will remember that

posted for dVerse Bout Rimés  creating a poem with these end words:  drive, side, night, lied, wage, saved, made, face, nurse, church, worse, purse, back, that..

48 comments:

  1. ha the weatherman always lies....love that healing of wounds within your spiritual church...forgiveness deposited in the souls purse...another cool line....well played...

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    1. Well, we can't blame the weatherman..as I know one who says it is hard to predict..thanks for visiting and you are usually number one
      under my sun..stole that rhyme from the cat..lol..

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  2. A loving poem for Valentines Day...well done!

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  3. that weatherman.. how do they hold on to their jobs? So often wrong.. but the rest of it.. so nice and loving.. for a Happy Valentine's Day..

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    1. Thank you..well, I think the weatherman can have a hard time nailing down that weather pattern..but, had to use the line..smiling

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  4. smiles...good that the weather man wasn't right and you could enjoy that walk without rain...it's good to nurse those wounds... a romantic write

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    1. Hi Claudia,

      It is good to nurse those wounds then you can heal..

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  5. Good to read a positive romantic outcome with the words a bit tricky, but you streamlined it nicely..

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    1. Thank you a bit of challenge with the word choice.

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  6. Realy enjoyed this; you say just the right amount in your lines and leave the rest to our imaginations ... smiles

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    1. Thank you, I enjoyed the prompt a bit of challenge to fit the words in just so..

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  7. Ha, at last a happier poem with those tricky end-rhymes - well done for turning it around!

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    1. Thank you Marina..I am romantic so had to twist it to reflect
      some loving thoughts..

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  8. Wow, you would never know those were words you had to use - they fit so well in the poem.
    And the weatherman always lies...

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    1. Good Morning Alex,

      Thanks for coming over for a read..how is the ninja wannabe? Still reading your book CassaStorm about half way through soon I will need to buy book 2.

      Have a good day!

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  9. Wow!!! I really loved this poem! The rythm and intensity of love is felt so powerfully. It was realy dreamy and good :) Such a deep connection, a sulful tie with someone must be profoundly heartwarming *.*

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    1. Thank you for such a lovely comment..much appreciated

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  10. This is really beautiful! I love the dreaminess of it. You are very talented :-)

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    1. thank you for the compliment :)

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  11. I so love "dreams like pennies in a jar I have saved" . A wonderful poem of love for valentine's day. Am off to the beach today for the weekend. Yay! Waves!

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    1. Sherry,

      Thank you my friend..hope you enjoy your ocean..

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  12. The weatherman lies away
    But mother nature does have its way
    A drive within life
    Free from strife
    Releasing dreams two go
    Together as the dreams flow
    Nursing such wounds to health
    Pennies to dreams brings true wealth

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    1. Mother nature sure does have her way
      causing turmoil on any given day..
      following dreams is the way to be
      listening to the whispering trees..

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  13. In WA state, along the the coast, weather forecasting is simple; if you can see Mt. Rainier, it will rain soon; if you can't see it, it's already raining; a sterling piece this, both the use of the words & the form.

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    1. Glenn,

      That is a sure way to forecast the weather..thank you for the nice comment. I do like this particular form thanks for noticing...

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  14. The weatherman always lie.. but I love how your managed to manoeuvre around those words that could create sadness.. and kept it sweet and loving

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    1. Well, Bjorn I am a romantic so I would need to weave some love into the poem...

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  15. Such a sweet and romantic poem. I really liked the gentle flow of it.
    -HA

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  16. This poem has an aura of faerie dust but its glitter doesn't deny the truth of what is said. Sometimes it's better to let love happen even if it breaks your moral standard because to deny it is even more immoral and wicked. Well said and beautifully written.

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    1. Thank you so much such a lovely comment..

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  17. you wove a wonderful poem around the words. Nice to see the happy ending too!

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    1. thank you was fun to write and I like happy endings...

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  18. true love tattooed, love that . . . and those darn weathermen always lie.

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    1. Love tattooed forever in hearts...

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  19. Wow your poetry is truly spectacular. I especially loved the ending of this one :)

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    1. Hi Keith,

      Thanks for coming over to read...hope you are doing well with your recent disconnect..

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  20. beautiful. this flows quite stunningly. you did a nice job incorporating the given words.

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  21. Beautiful. I especially enjoyed "dreams like pennies in a jar." Thank you.

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  22. If we removed ours masks... would the world be a better place?
    Or do we need them to preserve our space?

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    1. Interesting question..are masks a way of survival????

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