Sunday, February 23, 2014

Wind verses Sun



The Wind and Sun - Fable



















A traveler walking steady his path in life
from afar powerful wind and sun observed
weathered cloak protecting him from strife
facing  numerous trials he never swerved

Mighty wind blows, cold brushes raw skin
shaking off chills, pulling his cloak tighter
facing forceful element, determined  to win
thinking of her, harsh journey a bit lighter

Behind dark clouds,  sun peeks it's head
light warms soft flesh, loosening her cloak
sleeping under a tree, tulips bloom soft bed
thoughts of him, in gentle silence she woke

Eyes wide open, his silhouette comes in view
baring his soul slowly removing worn cloak
two reaching higher dreams vast sky of blue
freeing wild spirits, breaking yellow yoke
 
which  is a greater force the sun or the wind?

Writing Fables at dVerse..Bjorn is hosting
based on the fable "The Wind and the Sun"
moral: Kindness effects more than severity
I put my own spin on the fable..

32 comments:

  1. quite like this take on the old tale ~

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    1. Thank you so much it was rather fun to write.

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  2. Love the poetic voice of this... The moral of this is great.

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    1. Thanks Bjorn, Enjoyed the prompt.

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  3. ah so very true...the gentle warmth of the sun is much more powerful than a harsh wind when it comes to opening up...

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    1. Agree, I will take the warm sun any day...

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  4. nice...i am familiar with this one
    it is not force that wins
    but warmth
    love wins
    and that is a beautiful thing.
    smiles.

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    1. Hi Brian,

      Warmth wins as kindness can move mountains...

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  5. Positive is stronger than negative. Well done!

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    1. Indeed it is positive energy is a force that I
      like to dwell in...thank you for visiting.

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  6. I love the romantic and passionate twist in the ending ~ Better the gentle hand rather than forceful element ~

    Both you and Gayle wrote of the same fable, smiles ~

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    1. Thanks Grace,

      A gentle hand can mend hearts..

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  7. The elements in ones path
    Try and bring down their wrath
    But moving forward for the win
    And maybe a soon a little sin lol
    Wins the day every time
    Beneath there tree love chimes

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    1. Moving forward the way to go
      let go of inhibitions at one's show
      beneath the tree two will sing
      who knows what the future will bring

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  8. I love the beautiful detail that you colored your fable with...wonderful images. Did you love these fables as much as I did when I was a child?

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    1. Thank you for the wonderful comment. I did enjoy fables as a child.

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  9. I really enjoyed the telling of this fable, Truedessa. It is one which is unfamiliar to me too, but your poem brought it to life.

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    1. Hi Mary,

      Thanks so much..I remembered this one probably because the wind and sun were involved.

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  10. Ah - that's a great and very wonderful read. Loved it. Smiles

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  11. Great imagery and a fable well told:-)

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    1. Thank you for visiting and leaving a comment.

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  12. This is wonderful, though I am not familiar with the fable. I like his perseverance.

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    1. Thanks, through perseverance dreams can become reality..

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  13. Good morning, you!

    ~shoes~

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