Sunday, May 4, 2014

Devouring Doubt..

Chair With the Wings of a Vulture, 1960, Salvador Dali
 conquering  darkness
spoonfuls of enlightenment
candles  light  the  way 
 sitting   edgy   chair  of  thought 
 renewal  rising  bright  sun

~
darkness
winged  chair  of  thought 
devouring life's moments
silver candles burning  with   hope 
brightness




author's note: I wanted to explore two forms:
The first is a Tanka 5,7,5, 7, 7 syllable count
The second is a cinquain 2,4,6, 8, 2  

posted for the Magpie Tales
Mag 218

30 comments:

  1. I love writing both tanka and haiku. Something about the compact nature causes me to zero in upon clarity like you did so well here.

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  2. Devouring life's moments - like time.
    You made sense of a Dali creation - well done!!

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    1. Hi Alex,

      thanks as always for popping over for a visit...

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  3. Lots of depth here and things to ponder. I think we all have within us the ability to conquer darkness by concentrating on the light. Beautiful poem Truedessa.

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    1. Hi Keith,

      I agree darkness can be overcome with light..

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  4. Conquer the darkness of the present and past and then let light shine on through in a rainbow blast.

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    1. A rainbow blast that lasts and lasts..

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  5. love the hopeful images full of light...a very positive take on the prompt...

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  6. I feel the hope and see the beauty through your writing!

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  7. I love short poetry... for me the cinquain worked the better of the two with the message you wanted to give.

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    1. Hi Bjorn, I too like to write short poetry and I seem to enjoy the cinquain.

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  8. very well done- I like both!

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  9. i like the contrast of light and dark in that second part...
    the first two lines of the first one say so much as well..
    smiles.

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    1. Hi Brian,

      Always a pleasure to read your thoughtful comments.

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  10. I love the "spoonfuls of enlightenment".....

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    1. Hi Sherry,

      Every spoonful counts in the journey..

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  11. I agree with Sherry. I like the idea of enlightenment coming in spoonfuls.

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    1. thanks..may we always enjoy a taste..

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    1. thank you for the shower of blessings so kind of you..

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  13. Love the form and love the hope in your words. :-)

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  14. This is amazing. Both the picture and the poem. I'm amazed Salvador Dalí used a vulture's wings here! Your poem is a perfect match to it. This picture makes me think of something dark, something very threatening, whereas the light brings hope at the same time. You capture it beautifully in your words!

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    1. Hi Beate,

      Thank you for visiting. In life there is always contrast but, I like to
      look for the light.

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