Tuesday, May 27, 2014

Dashboard Messiah














The job cut him loose
no more work they said
shattering his dreams
into tiny pieces of glass
praying  lost in his car
to a dashboard messiah
his image tarnished
searching for a new persona
under a luminous moon
casting dark shadows
quick as lightning
 picking
     up speed
          driving  down I95 South
with the wind & a prayer
radio blasting , drowning
his thoughts..need to escape
opening a door new place
warmth...pass the collection
plate...Hallelujah
he is free...


posted for dVerse hosted by Anthony
writing poetry from the following words
Messiah,Allegory, Luminous, Plate, Shadow, Door, Persona, Glass. Vitiligo, Epochal, Pernicious, Warmth. You had to use at least 5 words. I used 8.

40 comments:

  1. praying lost in his car
    to a dashboard messiah...you had me at the title...

    i am glad his story found a good end though...sometimes being fired paves the way for something much greater...

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    1. Hi Brian,

      I thought you might like that title..for some it is a very real story as so many lose their jobs and look you are number one :-)

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  2. Truedessa, this is a very moving poem. Makes me sad for so many who hav this kind of 'freedom.'

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    1. Thank you Mary, it makes me sad as well.

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  3. I am sad that he lost his job, but may be it is a blessing ~ At least he feels freedom at the end ~

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    1. Sometimes blessings do come in disguise.

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  4. Getting kicked to the curb can be grand if one is willing to accept change in their land. Liked the dashboard messiah, hmmm a little hula girl wiggling on the dashboard? lol Then just drive, those who want to will survive.

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    1. Mankind possesses a strong will for survival
      a spark of hope will sometimes ignite their revival

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  5. This made me think of that song line, "Freedom's just another word for nothing left to lose." I can never decide if that's a good thing or not, but I hope in this case it turns out to be.

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    1. I've always pondered that line as well and now the song is looping in my head. Thanks for the visit.

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  6. ugh, losing a job is tough... and this line, "praying lost in his car
    to a dashboard messiah" SO GREAT and also easy to relate to. Great use of words

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    1. Thanks Anthony I enjoyed the prompt. It was fun to try to something
      different and just go where the words wandered.

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  7. Love that set apart, "picking up speed," excellent work on this.

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  8. Amazing title and a flow to this that makes us feel the urgency of despair …

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    1. Margaret thank you as I was hoping the reader might feel the urgency and loss..

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  9. it's tough to lose a job but it can also bear the possibility for a complete new start - glad it worked out well for him

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    1. It is said that when a door closes another opens and we hope that the next door is full of positive things in the journey.

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  10. Just the title caught me.. And then you turn it into a road-movie.. Hope he make it in the south..

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    1. Thanks Bjorn..a trailer to a much larger adventure..

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  11. Next to the plastic Jesus, beneath the fuzzy dice, & high school graduation tassel, alongside the hula dancer stuck with rubber feet to dance forever for the Christ hisself, we find the new persona, who will carry on regardless, who will get off his knees, & start anew; Again; strong piece; thanks.

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    1. Glenn, I think we will always find the new persona and reinvent our lives it is called survival .. I think. Thanks for such a great comment.

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  12. Desperation is very tangible in your words, Truedessa. I enjoyed your poem despite the sad feelings.

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    1. Thank you Gabriella where there is sadness there must also be a bit of joy.

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  13. It's often the way that when the worst happens somehow there is a sense of freedom at the end. A very true reflection. Nicely penned.

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    1. I guess when you have hit bottom there is no place to go but, up. Thanks for the comment.

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  14. Perhaps this is a blessing in disguise for him...as losing his job may lead to a "finding" of self...

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    1. Keith that is very true hope it all works out for those searching for a new road in life.

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  15. Great job with the words! Nice!

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    1. Thanks ayala it was fun to write..

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  16. "...praying to a dashboard messiah" is very cool.

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    1. Hi Sherry, so nice to see my friend..thanks for visiting..

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  17. A sad circumstance, well told. Sometimes the end of something makes the way for the beginning of something better...

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    1. I do agree while the story is sad and very real for so many people it is my hope that a new door will appear with something better to offer in life.

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  18. Freedom is one thing! But being free after losing a job can be disastrous. Hopefully being free for something better is in the works for him! Great write Truedessa!

    Hank

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    1. I agree Hank losing a job is a top source of stress in life..everyday I read in the paper or hear on the news of so many losing their jobs.

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  19. Wow! The speed that your poem took, from the ominous beginning towards the rush of the last lines left me breathless. :-) Well done.

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    1. Thank you for visiting and feeling the journey...

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  20. absolutely love the title!

    great portrayal of someone losing their job...near the end i sort of get a feeling of freedom, of a chance to start over, perhaps.

    stacy lynn mar
    http://warningthestars.blogspot.com/

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    1. Hi Stacy,

      Thanks for visiting..for some a fresh start and for some a long hard road. So sad when so many lose their jobs.

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