Sunday, January 25, 2015

My Eyes Flutter Behind Closed Lids

Mag 255


closing my eyes
so that I might see
the full span of my  journey
revealing only a part of myself
in the shadow lands, longing to be free
my dreams, wrapped in a cocoon of darkness
waiting for spring sunlight  to bring forth new life

closing my eyes
so that I might see
wings flutter in anticipation
whispering secrets to the butterfly
carrying wishes of the soul to the sky
my dreams slowly awaken, transformation
bursting free from within, seeking the nectar of life

opening my eyes,  to new possibilities

posted for the Mag
sharing with Poets United

78 comments:

  1. Wonderful poem, exquisite !!! find the nectar of life and new possibilities, I like!

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    1. Thank you, oh to enjoy the nectar of life.

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  2. Ah, the butterfly is a good keeper of secrets, so I think the secret will be safe. And those possibilities ahead are limitless! Smiles.

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    1. Hi Mary,

      The butterfly is a good keeper of secrets and will carry your wishes to the heavens.

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  3. I like the movement you describe; inward first to assess what is behind, outward then. The first step is necessary I agree before the next one can be possible.

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    1. Thanks Gabriella, a time of reflection in the journey of the butterfly.

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  4. nice play on the butterfly...and your own transformation...in particular i like the whispering between her and the butterfly in shared secrets....

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    1. Thanks Brian, I always enjoy reading your thoughtful comments.

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  5. I love the shape of this poem, as well as its message - the butterfly carrying messages of the soul to the sky....and opening one's eyes to new possibilities. Wonderful!

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    1. Sherry, Thanks for visiting in the journey we must be willing to open our eyes. Wishing my friend a safe journey always.

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  6. what a lovely read... filled with hope and possibilities... your lines made beautiful word pictures

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    1. Thank you for visiting and your kind thoughts.

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  7. I like that it looks like two closed eyes. Lovely sentiment.

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  8. I luv what the Spring sunlight carries in its path of revelations,
    Nice write
    happy you stopped by to read mine

    Much love...

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    1. Thank you Gillena was a pleasure to read your poem.

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  9. new possibilities...We always have that.

    Thanks for coming by.

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    1. Gail you are welcome..always nice to visit a friend. Thanks for visiting here as well.

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  10. Like a butterfly we can burst free,recreate and learn anew. Plus spring doe spring forth more, with no crummy snow at any shore

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    1. Ah, I long for spring and bursting free.

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  11. The secrets of a butterfly, I like the awakening to new possibilities ~ Let that energy come & burst forth, smiles ~

    Good to read you Truedessa ~ Have a good week ahead ~

    Grace

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    1. Thanks Grace,

      I am still feeling a bit under the weather..no pun intended as snow is flying. I do need a burst of energy.

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  12. love the image of the butterfly

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  13. in the shadow lands longing to be free......

    ALOHA from Honolulu
    ComfortSpiral
    <3

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    1. Aloha - Oh, it would be wonderful to have some of that weather of yours.

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  14. i think there are def. times when we see our own wishes and dreams better with closed eyes and once the dreams have taken shape we're cool to open them again as well

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    1. That is very true, sometimes we need to visualize and then chase after those dreams.

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  15. Sometimes we have to close our eyes to see. And butterflies are better as companions than many other.

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    1. Butterflies, hold secrets of the soul I am told.

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  16. "closing my eyes, so that I might see" so necessary sometimes.

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  17. very wonderful interpretation of the picture.. i love it.

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  18. a new beginning - spring is the perfect metaphor

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    1. Hi totomai, After seeing all your lovely flower photos I long for spring.

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  19. Closing eyes to reflect & look back on the past journey you had... and opening eyes to view the countless possibilities before you... ah, how wonderfully you have expressed these from the accompanying photo through the words you weaved in this poem... well done my friend... hope you are already well... smiles...

    - ksm

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    1. Hi Kelvin,

      I am still not feeling the best, but I am getting around a bit more. Thanks for asking my friend.

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  20. seeking the nectar of life

    That's the way to do it! :-)

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    1. We all need to find that nectar of life.

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  21. Sometimes we see better with our eyes closed (giving our inner sight more freedom).

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    1. Rosemary, I think you truly understand sometimes we see better behind closed lids.

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  22. Looking within, not revealing all at once, is a sure way to see the self better before blooming. Ncely captued in strong images.

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    1. I like that Susan, a flower waiting to bloom.

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  23. Butterfly night vision goggles only required until the force is strong in you !

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    1. haha - trying to nurture that force and then the night vision goggles can be put away. Interesting reply.

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  24. What a great take on the prompt! I love the hopeful ending :)

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    1. Thanks Keith, nice to see you back blogging and Congratulations.

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  25. Wonderful! If you can dream it, you can make it happen.

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    1. Alex,

      Thanks, may all your best dreams come true.

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  26. Sometimes we need to close our eyes to be able to see fully again..this poem captures that beautifully

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    1. That is very true, thanks for the comment.

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  27. Cool imaginative write!

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    1. One never knows where the mind will go when writing.

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  28. Happy you ended with the positive. It nicely weighted the piece.

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  29. The nectar of my life is beer, but it doesn't work so well for the butterfly; when drunk, he's just terrible at keeping secrets.

    Kidding aside, I love this poem. And the shape you crafted it into. I'm always amazed by those who can write poetry AND can do that art form where they shape the words into a physical design.

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    1. haha - I wouldn't expect any other nectar from the beer guys and I would gladly share a pint and a laugh or two.

      Thanks for the visiting.

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  30. Sometimes we see more clearly when we take time to close our eyes in faith and peace. This is lovely Truedessa.

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    1. Thanks Carrie, sometimes we just need time to reflect.

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  31. As usual, True, your words are exceptional...

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    1. Thank you Berowne, you are too kind.

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  32. Thanks Loredana - Butterflies are so beautiful and a reminder of warmer days.

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  33. Lovely piece, I can even see a butterfly! Quite creative.

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  34. stellar take on this weeks image!

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  35. Pretty form...lovely words...

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    1. Thank you Tess for the interesting prompt.

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  36. Seems like we saw this much the same way. I especially like the shape of the poem, and the title.

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    1. Hi Susan,

      I just read your poem and I would say we did share a vision.

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  37. my dreams slowly awaken, transformation
    bursting free from within, seeking the nectar of life

    Beautifully done Truedessa! One yearns and is kept hopeful to achieve one's resolve. Great lines and presentation.

    Hank

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    1. Hi Hank,

      The guy who is always number one. Thanks for your lovely comment much appreciated.

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  38. Great hopes and aspirations nicely conveyed.
    Love the positive ending :)
    Hope it's true for all!
    "opening my eyes, to new possibilities"
    May we all recognize the new possibilities & succeed!

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    1. May we all see hope in new things. Thanks for the lovely note.

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  39. this is so very inspiring to me.

    i find myself hoping the author does, indeed, find those dreams! :)

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    1. Thanks Stacy, I too hope that dreams are discovered.

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