Thursday, February 26, 2015

Cost of a Toss













i  need  no  reminder the  cost 
no  weapons halt what  has begun
the  final  golden coin gets tossed
i  need  no  reminder the  cost 
battlefield, who will  be lost 
seeking  hope in a rising sun
no  weapons halt  what has begun
i  need  no  reminder the  cost 
 

Over at dVerse creating a poem
around one line from Brian or
Claudia's poem. I chose Brian's
poem "if i stay"


44 comments:

  1. Wow, you really took Brian's line and ran with it! Powerful statement for something indeed too "costly." Well done.

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    1. Hi Ginny,

      Thanks that line just jumped out at me so I had to give it a run.

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  2. Battle is always too costly - well done!

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    1. Battles are often costly on many levels. Thanks Alex!

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  3. You made a strong point in this poem, Truedessa. The cost IS high.

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    1. The cost is higher than we can imagine.

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  4. the cost on the battle field is too great, when we are talking about war for sure...i wish the guys in charge would not toss that coin as if it cost so little....

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    1. I agree a costly toss ...I was going to go another angle with this the cost of love..

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  5. A cost that is often too high, in so many different ways. I like the way you repeat Claudia's line in your poem.

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    1. Thanks Gabriella, that was Brian's line..smiling..always appreciate your visits.

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  6. Oh, that golden coin....it gets tossed in many a game in life!

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    1. That is does and one never knows how it will land.

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  7. the cost is too great in so many way... powerful write; packs a punch in few words :)

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    1. and I wonder are we ready for such a costly expense..

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  8. Short but really says so much in just a few lines. Each time we think we know the costs... and yet we don't, or wilfully disregard them.

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    1. That is true and I wonder will we ever learn

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  9. Oh I loke how you used Brian's line to a triolet,.. And so effective - the cost is always high.

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    1. Thanks Bjorn the cost is high and has a ripple effect..

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  10. A very effective use of the line to make a very effective poem.

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    1. Thanks for visiting Rosemary..

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  11. the cost is high... and the repetition works very well and ups the intensity as well... i just don't hope that it gives three points for bri then...hahah... smiles

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    1. haha - I didn't think about that when I wrote a triolet..Are we allowed to write more than one..that cat line of yours really speaks to me as well..

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  12. The proliferation of firepower will always make battles imminent!

    Hank

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    1. There have always been battles since the earliest of times. The choice of weapons have greatly changed through the hourglass..

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  13. There would be a lot fewer wars if it required the heads of states to duke it out to the death instead of armies!

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  14. They cost in many a way, but they keep on waging on, never ending cycle.

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    1. Battles will always continue in the fight for power a never ending cycle.

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  15. The cost is immense. Sad, that although we know this, war wages on as if it were a necessary part of humanity. Your poem makes a powerful statement.

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    1. Thanks Myrna - Unfortunately, war is a reality in an ever changing world.

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  16. the repeated refrain is very effective - such a great cost indeed

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    1. thanks, Brian's words are the refrain..

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  17. I like the different response -this one of the price of war ~ Its too high, I agree ~

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    1. I wonder when or if war will ever end???

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  18. Fantastic. It says it all, briefly and potently.

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  19. every day now, we hear the sabers rattling; fear & profiling stirred up in our coffee--moving the war on terror into its second decade, the VA/military hospitals full, & so are the cemeteries.

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    1. The hospitals are full and still so many are wounded needing care and sad about the cemeteries.

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  20. "no weapons halt what has begun"...a powerful line about the futility of violence to solve problems. Powerful use of Brian's line.

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    1. I wonder what can stop what has begun?

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  21. Very creative, made those words your own - the repetition was powerful!

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    1. thank you...I just felt the words..

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  22. This is very powerful, accentuated by the shortness of the poem.

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