Sunday, March 29, 2015

Until the River Meets the Sea



until the river bends
and I drift into the sea
in my heart you'll always be
love a mystery that never ends

laid my dreams in a river bed
heartache, silent ripples of loss
skipping stones with just one toss
recalling all the words we said

riding  waves through eternity
rolling off shorelines of paradise
tossed in the waters of sacrifice
seeking a piece of serenity

until the river bends
and I drift into the sea
in my heart you'll always be
love a mystery that never ends

lulled to sleep, by a mariner's song
billowing sails of tranquility
verses of poetic sensibility
tears wept for a love so strong

beacon of light flickers ahead
parting  clouds ,  sun does shine
slowly giving birth in a river bed
those wondrous dreams of mine

until the river bends
and I drift into the sea
in my heart you'll always be
love a mystery that never ends



 sharing with Poets United
Thanks for reading...
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55 comments:

  1. Beautifully executed...highly charming! Your poem depicts your romantic soul... :)
    I specially adore the lines:

    "until the river bends
    and I drift into the sea
    in my heart you'll always be
    love a mystery that never ends"

    xoxo

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    1. Thank you for the lovely comment..I am known to be a hopeless romantic..

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  2. Particularly the end was intriguing.. the estuary is indeed a place of parting... the metaphor worked very well.

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    1. Hi Bjorn, Happy Sunday..thanks for reading..

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  3. The repeated lines really give it that kick indeed, lyrical for sure at your feed. The river sure twists about this way and that.

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    1. The rivers twists and turns when you least expect it, well I have a couple of versions of this, but this is the one I decided to go with today.

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  4. you used lovely images.. close to my heart.

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  5. Wonderful! We need that beacon of light.

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    1. That we do need a light to guide the way...

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  6. I often lull myself to sleep.

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  7. So passionate to read, Truedesa. It's like a romantic song I'd like to listen to again and again. Love, indeed, moves in mysterious ways. Thanks for the poem!

    - ksm

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    1. Thank Kelvin, How are you my friend? I am always delighted when you visit.

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    2. I am doing fine though I have had to limit blogging for at least once a week, usually during Sundays, due to conflict on my scheds at work. Smiles. I hope you are well too my friend. Thank you!

      - ksm

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    3. Hi Kelvin, I am glad to hear you are doing well and just busy with work..Take care my friend..

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  8. Just so beautiful and so much yearning and love in this:)

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    1. Thank you ..hope you are enjoying your day..

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  9. This is very romantic with a bit of mystery since we understand the relationship probably is no more.

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    1. There is always mystery within the waters of love..

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  10. Beautiful words, but I love how even the 'shape' of the words looks like undulating waves.

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    1. hmm..I hadn't noticed that thanks for opening my eyes to the waves..

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    2. And here I thought you did that on purpose. That's even more impressive.

      It almost reminds me of when someone asks me about the symbolism I put in a book... and I actually didn't intend anything poignant or metaphorical. It was just literal. Maybe the subconscious is smarter than we give it credit for and we meant to do it all along...?

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    3. That is an interesting concept, but I do believe the subconscious is very smart. Hmm..I am always seeing symbolism in things and I often wonder if it is just me or do others see it as well?

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  11. I very much like the repetition of 'in my heart you'll always be.' As I read this poem, I kind of felt as if I was riding the waves.....not only in the sea but right to that eternity you spoke of.

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    1. Hi Mary,

      Thank you for the comment, as I writer it is gratifying to know someone can feel the words. I hope you are enjoying your weekend.

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  12. I love the refrain, until the river ends ~ Romantic and hopeful despite the pain of loss ~

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  13. I especially love the repeated stanza, and "laid my dreams in a river bed". This is such a beautiful poem, my friend.

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    1. Hi Sherry,

      Thanks as always my friend..I didn't see the owl poem today???

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  14. Lyrical and hypnotic in feel, but quiet clear in its message, I can appreciate a sense of confession, about a tie no longer bound.

    Lovely!!

    Poppy

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    1. hypnotic a good word to describe the journey...

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  15. Beautiful poem...they dance like lyrics of a love song.

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  16. a promise of eternal love - with or without the lover. melancholic, hopeful and intriguing

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  17. dreams being birthed in a river bed...I like that.

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    1. Thanks Gail, it a good place to hatch some dreams..

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  18. i like this flow to the sunshine...a beautiful poem..

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  19. I love that repeated chorus..we must always keep trying..just as the sea keeps on moving

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    1. that is so true in life we have to keep moving...

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  20. An eternal love that lingers on just as the way the water flows! A beautiful write Truedessa!

    Hank

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  21. This poem has a beautiful flow, a calm rhythm, like ocean waves. The minute I started reading it I felt the motion, soft and subtle but so solid and strong. I think this rhythm is what first took me into the poem and then the words painted the picture.

    It's as if your poem is like a slow dance.

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    1. Lauren, Thanks so much for the lovely comment and visiting. So, tell me will it be big ears or small?

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    2. Big ears won! Thanks for voting!

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  22. Well written... a true poet!
    ZQ

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    1. Thank you for your lovely compliment. Wishing you a day full of happiness.

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  23. I do love it when poems rhyme!

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    1. Hi Dezzie, Me too..spy anything interesting lately?

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  24. thank you for the visit and the lovely comment :)

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  25. How are you feeling today?

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    1. Getting a bit better Blue..How are you?

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