Sunday, August 9, 2015

Meet & Greet the Driftwoods

pic - Truedessa's Collection






















do you want to take a road trip
under a summer sky, hearts sigh 
past the  veil we silently slip 

here a driftwood band, let it rip 
along  the river trees grow high 
do you want to take a road trip

wild guitarist is rather  hip 
flaming star in a distant sky 
past the veil we silently slip 

ancient drummer has a good grip 
fast rhythm, apparitions float by 
do you  want to take a road trip 

nectar of music we can sip
drink from the well, it's never dry
past the veil we silently slip

to the Dirftwoods, hats we do tip
holding hands, above a soft cry
do you want to take a road trip
past the the veil we silently slip


posted for Poets United
Thank you for the visit

43 comments:

  1. Thois is like taking a dance along the road.. Love how you used the rhythm of the Villanelle to present this dance between exciting places.

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    1. Thanks Bjorn, nice to see you back around...

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  2. I want to that road trip while sipping that nectar of music ~

    Fantastic villanelle form, cheers ~

    Grace

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    1. Thanks Grace - have a great day, perhaps some music you can play.

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  3. This sounds a very big celebration - a joyous party, Truedessa.

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    1. At night they have a big fire and the spirit walkers dance.

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  4. nectar of music we can sip
    drink from the well, it's never dry
    past the veil we silently slip

    Beautiful lines. Have a nice day ahead :D

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    1. Thank you so much! I hope you have a good day as well.

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  5. Yes! I do! Smiles. I love this lilting poem!

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    1. Hi Sherry,

      I have to say I love a good road trip filled with music and adventure.

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  6. Journeying is a dance and you have captured that beautifully.

    Thanks for visiting. Shhh, it's a secret...I keep tiny stones of each place I go and simply have to touch the stone for the memory. I have bowls of memory stones!

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    1. Thanks Gail..your secret is safe..those stones do hold memories..smiling.

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  7. An effortless magical creation :)

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  8. I can imagine the road trip about which you are writing. What a beautiful activity for a summer day.

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    1. Hi Mary,

      I have to try and enjoy these summer days as they go so quickly.

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  9. Sounds like a road trip for the ages, where one can write about it in a book of many pages

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    1. haha - that I could do write on and on and on...thanks for stopping over..

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  10. These words had me skipping on this lovely ride!

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    1. glad you enjoyed the trip...

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  11. Awesome villanelle and "a road trip" - a very cool theme for these August end-of-summer-freedom days! I enjoyed this piece very much,

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    1. Thanks Wendy...I don't want summer to end..

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  12. Sipping the nectar of music. Beautiful. Yes, I would definitely love a road trip. Journey > destination, especially if said journey includes some great tunes.

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    1. Hey, I am all for a road trip where music is involved...let the music play and play and play...

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  13. The road trip image is great, mainly because you want to know where you might be going on the road. Nice job.

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    1. Thanks for the visit...it was fun trip as I took in the view..

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  14. ah! so beautiful. I love the ancient mystic elements!!

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    1. glad you want to go on a roadtrip

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  16. Most guitarists are rather hip!
    You can stop laughing at me now...

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    1. haha - that they are and rather slick as they
      let their guitars rip with a good riff...smiling..
      I wrote one just about the guitarist..I will have
      to post that soon...

      hey hip rhymes with slip...

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  17. Yes indeed - i would like to take that road trip!

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    1. Heck, we need to get a tour bus so all of us can go on road trip..

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  18. Love the musicality of this piece. During my second reading of it, I could hear my own pauses singing the song...

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    1. Thank you for that comment it made me smile to think of you singing the song.

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  19. Haha yes that is exactly the kind of thing to see on a road trip.

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    1. haha - that it is ..the unusual is always a great find..

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  20. There is something special about getting away from the normal routine and feeling free. Great rhythm in this as the car whisks by the scenery.

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  21. Yes! A road trip sounds wonderful, especially when you put it like this:
    "nectar of music we can sip
    drink from the well, it's never dry"

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  22. i loved your poem and image combination. the poem was upbeat, loved the concept and all. all in all, a fun read. more please!!!

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  23. Your Villanelle sounds beautifully, True! I like the repetition of "Do you want to take a road trip" line while adding more details in each verse - very cool! Makes me reevaluate if I really like to take that road. Moving and dancing poem, love it!

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  24. I do love it when you do something with rhymes :)

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