Sunday, October 25, 2015

Haunting Sea/She Sees

Artwork by Adrian Borda


deep sea of mystic blue , the raven flew
sun slowly sets, but somewhere  it rises
vessel of vacant  dreams sails  into  view 
ghosts  from  the  past wear many disguises

 in  a  distant land ,  searching for  treasure 
 following  star  maps,  pieces  of  lost  hearts
 mysterious world of hidden pleasure
black  tears, pages of  white  a  story starts

 sending  letters to an  address  unknown 
pirates sail  fortune  dancing  in  their  head 
skeletons of  yesterday , wild sea  moans
 beneath hallow black moon, tales from the dead

sojourning  into the depth of the soul 
towards the morning light  becoming  whole 

sharing with Poets United

53 comments:

  1. This is super cool, from the title, image, and opening through to the last word. I enjoyed your sneaky little extra spaces.

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    1. Thank you so much paper sea...interesting name...

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  2. I enjoyed all these images in one piece, exciting, sad, romantic and mad...all good things of course.

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    1. Hi Gail,

      I guess it was a sea of emotions...

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  3. Wish fortunes would dance in more than ones head haha great rhythm to this one

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    1. haha - yeah need more than fortune dancing in one's head..need to find that treasure map pronto..could it be on Bora Bora..smiling..

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  4. Oh, like a a ghost-story or an ancient mariner,.. the sea is a wonderful place to draw darkness into life.

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    1. I agree Bjorn the sea is haunting and powerful and mysterious makes for great writing.

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  5. Very invoking! The fortunes that were almost had...

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    1. Well, they say there is still lost treasures buried along the coastlines where ships once sailed. Who knows where fortune lurks?

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  6. Such a palpable feeling of oozing terror in this poem. Incredible writing.

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  7. This is very wonderful - such beautiful imagery - and I love the resolution at the end.

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    1. Happy Sunday Sherry, I recently discovered this artist and so many of his pieces just spoke to me.

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  8. absolutely stunning.
    almost reads like a folklore melody.
    so much here to reread and visualize.

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  9. Beautiful subtle rhymes here. Just wonderful.

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    1. haunting as the picture I think..

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  11. I love the images of the haunting sea here...well done.

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  12. Oh, all this dark fantasy may disappear with ' the morning light' ...and only tales of bright will entertain our lives. Much Love!

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    1. Where there is darkness there is also light.

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  13. Good on you for rhyming!





    ALOHA, Friend
    ComfortSpiral

    (\__/)
    (='.'=)
    (")_('')

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    1. Hi Cloudia,

      I do enjoy a rhyme here and there...

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  14. There is a lot of mystery in these words......I am curious about the unknown address..smiles.

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    1. I am curious about the unknown address as well..maybe, someday it will be located.

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  15. "ghosts from the past wear many disguises" - Whew: goosebumps. Some hauntiing, nautical images in this extended metaphor. Wonderful writing.

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    1. Thanks Wendy - I guess as Halloween approaches..ghosts come to mind.

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  16. wild sea moans beneath hallow
    black moon, tales from the dead

    Morbidly real even these days when pirates still roam the seas. Life and assets at stake especially when kidnapped for ransom in the Philippines!. Nice twist Truedessa!

    Hank

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    1. Hank,

      I guess you are right there are modern day pirates out there lurking. So sad when someone is held hostage. I didn't realize this was a big problem in the Philippines.

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    1. Thanks..I was in a bit of a blue mood

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  18. ghosts from the past wear many disguises... the night can be misery or magic to the haunted soul.

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    1. That is true - depends on the night and the dream

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  19. Such bold and powerful imagery - morning can indeed be a relief...much lead light to break up the weight of monochrome..

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    1. lead = needed - sorry how could spellcheck get it that wrong!

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    2. ha - that is very true..a little light can go a long way I think..

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  20. I absolutely love the visuals of this, especially black tears on white paper. So striking. You make me wish I could write poetry.

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    1. Well, sometimes I wish I could write humor...and you guys have mastered that at your place.

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  21. I've been searching for treasure for a long time, True. How about you?

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    1. haha - Depends on the treasure you are seeking.
      some treasures have no monetary value
      as they are more precious..jmo...

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    2. That's the kind I'm talking about... You know the shoe I'm seeking is a blue metaphor....

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    3. I know Blue...how are you today?

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  22. Haunting picture. Did you write the poem to accompany it, as ekphrasis? Because the poem takes it apart as if She Seeing, and gives us the ship as treasure ship with pirates and all their gear. Amazing enough for a fantasy dream, but waking up is also welcome!

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    1. Susan, Actually, I was recently introduced to this artist and his work, This particular picture just screamed at me. I had a few fragments written that fit and decided to expand on it. I am a vivid dreamer so I could def have a dream very much like this.

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  23. Ooh, this may be your best yet!

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