Sunday, February 7, 2016

Vigilantly Waiting



along a rocky coastline , I  stand 
echoes of mystery , drifting  waves 
his ship sailed towards a distant land 
 turbulent waters, fearless & brave

 vigilantly , waiting for his return 
 reclaiming treasures  promised to me
 raging waters trail beyond the stern 
 shadowy figure , captain of the sea

guarding hidden  harbor of my heart 
you once took refuge in my loving arms 
my soul grieved the day you did  depart 
 spellbound by the tides magical charms 

pierced by a harpoon whales saddest song 
 awakening  dreams , sleeping too long ...

prompt:  MagpieTales #305
sharing with Poets United

72 comments:

  1. This is so poignant, the captain who stole her heart and sailed away, her on the shore....maybe one day he will turn the ship around and sail home.

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    1. Hi Sherry,

      Maybe, one day the winds of change will bring him home...

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  2. It is very sad when the loved one departs. I do think that the call of the sea, for some, is hard to resist. I like the awakening of dreams in the last stanza!

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    1. There is an allure about the sea and it does call to the hearts of some...

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  3. Especially back in the day when they sailed away, no contact what so ever. Be rough indeed.

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    1. Indeed, hard to watch one sail away with the tide not knowing if he will roll back in...

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  4. While one is living his dream another is awakening. The poem in this relationship are living verses yet to be written

    Much love...

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    1. Gillena - very insightful of you to see that in the words.

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  5. Love this ballad style of your poem...would be cool to hear it in reading...

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    1. Thanks Humbird, a ballad of the heart...

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  6. Perhaps a past life memory

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  7. Delightful paradox of "awakwning dreams , sleeping too long "
    Good one

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    1. haha - I knew you would catch that line

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  8. Very moving. I love your turns of phrase, too.

    "my soul grieved the day you did depart
    spellbound by the tides magical charms"

    Love it.

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    1. Thank Patty for visiting and welcome!

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  9. "hidden harbor of my heart"---great alliteration and rich imagery...love it.

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    1. Protecting that harbor can be rough some days...

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  10. Man, I hope he gets a good cellphone signal out there so he can send her plenty of smiley face emojis. But really, this was beautifully haunting. Such a feeling of love lost/uncertainty.

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    1. haha - well, he better have a good cell phone plan..

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  11. That was a pleasure to read - beautifully crafted; wonderful words!

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    1. Wendy, once I again I thank you for your kind words. May that pen of yours always have something to say. I enjoy your poems.

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  12. wander-lust set beautifully against home...

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    1. Wander-lust - a great descriptive comment :)

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  13. I just hope the captain is aware of the rift he caused... hope he will come back and mend what's torn.

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    1. hmm - I think the sea calls him to another shore...

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  14. Oh the last verse is audible..loud as a whale singing in grief..to be left behind..stranded on shore can feel so lonely..perhaps it is better to be wandering than waiting..

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    1. hmm..I guess she could choose to wander inland who knows what she might discover but, I think her heart will always belong to the captain.

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  15. Reminds me of the Loreena McKennit song: "Oh, a blacksmith courted me...." Proving a deceitful knave, alas.

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    1. Thanks for sharing this....Proving a deceitful knave...

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  16. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cxSQHzl-wIk

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    1. Wow - Thanks for sharing the link. I had not heard of this song but, I certainly can feel the words.

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  17. You really captured the heartbreak of waiting...

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  18. Most frustrating having to wait. Many take it lightly but it is a responsibility and commitment.

    Hank

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    1. Hi Hank,

      I agree, while he is out discovering adventures she is left ashore wondering if he will ever return. I had a friend who's husband was a fisherman and he would be gone for days and she always worried about the storms.

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    2. Rightly so Truedessa Been told wives of pilots have the same worries too.

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    3. Rightly so Truedessa Been told wives of pilots have the same worries too.

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  19. I really like the closing:
    "spellbound by the tides magical charms
    pierced by a harpoon whales saddest song awakening dreams ,sleeping too long"

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    1. I saw "The Heart of the Sea" and the piercing of those whales was heartbreaking.

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  20. vigilantly guarding; fearless and brave...:)

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    1. I think they are both very strong he for facing the storms on the sea and her for facing the storm of her heart.

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  21. So beautiful, your words of yearning for a love gone. I loved reading this.

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    1. Thank you Myrna...it is sorrowful...

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  22. Those last lines added another dimension of sadness.

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    1. ah Ballads speak from and to the heart..my favorite...

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  24. The last two lines creates a melody for the rest of the words. Sort of like the effective last sad note of an orchestra.

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    1. Oh, I like that image I can hear that last note wailing...

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  25. Melancholy and lovely, especially the final couplet.

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  26. lovely and filled with feeling

    =)

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    1. Thank you I was trying to capture her feelings as she looked out towards the sea..

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  27. The lovely rhyming works so well here...nice...

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    1. Tess, thank you for the lovely prompt. I cannot leave a comment on your blog but, I wanted to let you know I always read.

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  28. She is the balance between softness and strength! A beautiful tale!

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    1. Thanks Carol, I think she needs to have a strong will..

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  29. Hey Truedessa!

    I reckon you've been vigilantly waiting for shy and humble me to finally get to your blog!

    Shall he return? One thing is for "shore", your prose doesn't leave me, all at sea, you see...

    Gary, Gary, never contrary.........

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    1. I "shore" have been waiting a long time for my friend Gary Gary to float along...

      How are you my friend? All well in the land of nod?

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    2. I'm typing from the land of nod and I'm dreaming that I'm leaving a reply comment on your post at like three in the morning. I think I'm okay. Of course, being such a wonderful guy, I've not been posting so I could leave comments on awesome blogs like yours.

      Hope all is well on planet Truedessa...

      Gary

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    3. Ah yes, the realm is doing fine...of course Valentine's Day is coming up soon so the planet is in a bit of a tizzy...I need to work on those golden rules..Venus in the meantime is sending out strong frequencies and now my planet is spinning out of control...haha...

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  30. Im partial to a firm rhyme scheme, as you know. I loved several lines in this.

    The call of the sea. How it takes us away

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    1. There is something magical about those rolling waters...

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  31. very sad all those broken hearts waiting...

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