Monday, May 30, 2016

Suspended Between Two Points




Dreaming beneath a twilight sky
my heart and soul caught
in a handwoven net of love
your voice whispers in my
ear in  a gentle b.r.e.e.z.e
swaying to the rhythm
of life,  my lips forming
 words I need to say
wishing upon a star


posted for dVerse
writing poetry
using 44 words
key word breeze
 

 pic - unknown

46 comments:

  1. Oh.. to Love thE Breeze
    tHe staRs oF shiNe..
    WinGlits
    Ocean
    diAtoms
    bRinGing
    liGht Now to
    neW moon
    sKeYes..
    to Love iT
    aLL to bE iT
    All comFort
    BliSs
    wE
    cAn
    bE
    noW..
    In sMiLes
    oF LoVeAll..:)

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    1. Hi,

      That is a lovely comment and I see you are still not short on words. Much appreciated!

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  2. Simply gorgeous. Goodness.

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  3. I just love this. That hand woven net of love....this is just so wonderful in so many ways.

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  4. I do love that whisper. Some things should not be said aloud.

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    1. Bjorn, That is true somethings are meant to be spoken in soft whispers.

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  5. Really nice! Wonderful flow.

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    1. Thank Alex - ebb and flow of the oceans tides

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  6. Wonderful. Love the image love the words! Swaying with you here...

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    1. Thanks! Find that star and make a wish!

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  7. A little whisper between two, throw in some fine swaying too.

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    1. Whispers in the night! Shhh..

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  8. Gentle and soft, I am wishing upon a star, smiles ~

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    1. I like to star gaze and wait for that first star and make a wish and blow it into the wind.

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  9. love the phrase "handwoven net of love". Like the hammock in your picture might have been woven by hand, so true love is something that is truly hand-woven over time.

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    1. Hi Bryan,

      I agree love is unique so I think it would be hand woven.

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  10. "swaying to the rhythm of life" -- lovely.

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    1. Thanks Sasha - I think one just has to catch the beat in life

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  11. I like the way you used "breeze" as a whisper. Very nice.

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  12. Hey Truedessa,

    How soothing, my poetic friend. Now then, it's "Hammock Time!" "Can't touch this (oh-oh oh oh oh-oh-oh)
    Can't touch this (oh-oh oh oh oh-oh-oh)"

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    1. Gary,

      Ok, you made me laugh it's Hammock Time

      Go with the flow in a spin if you can't move to this
      Then you probably are dead
      So wave your hands in the air
      Bust through the moves run your fingers through your hair

      Read more: MC Hammer - U Can't Touch This Lyrics | MetroLyrics

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  13. Lovely! Such a tender extended metaphor, exquisitely expressed.

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  14. my lips forming
    words I need to say
    wishing upon a star

    How powerful can be the influence of love be on one's mind. Words may not be able to really express the feeling. Rightly so True!

    Hank

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    1. Hank, sometimes the words just don't come out quite right.

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  15. Such a lovely ambiance. You totally transported me.

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  16. I love it. It takes me to another place... a place where I need a hammock built for two and a clear, starry night.

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    1. Well, you have to admire those starry nights.

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  17. So dreamy and lovely. Sigh.

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    1. Hi Sherry,

      We need to catch up later this week!

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  18. Oh I love this. I felt like I was the one swaying.

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    1. Hi Sandra,

      Thanks for visiting.

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  19. Very gentle and soft. Lovely write.

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    1. Thank you! I was in a thoughtful mood..

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  20. The image of a hammock goes perfectly with your verse.

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    1. Thanks I wrote the poem first and then tried to find a pic to compliment the writing.

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  21. I love the "breeze"...such a lovely poem :) and a perfect picture for it.

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    1. Thanks! I hope you are doing well it has been some time since we conversed.

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