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| Artist: Claudia Schoenfeld Used with Permission |
In the heart there lives a song
filled with golden stars, blue moon
and amethyst skies that sing to me
in a cave a dragon begins to stir
pounding black & white keys
awakening to musical dreams
but, who will hear the melody
posted for dVerse
writing Sevenling
I have no clue if I did this correctly
as it is my first time using this form
Oh I hear it! I used to live with a man I often called the Black Dragon who had trained to play piano for the concert stage. So I can hear the dragon pounding away. Wonderful poem and yes, you did it correctly
ReplyDeleteThanks, I wasn't sure how I did with the form, so the feedback is appreciated.
Deletewill we hear our own song...and will we sing it, or will we follow it?
ReplyDeletein the heart, there is def a song.
I hope to hear the melody and follow where it leads. Yes, the heart carries a unique song
Deletei think it's so important that we play our melody - no matter if there's a listener or not... good to see you..
ReplyDeleteClaudia that is true we must play from the heart for ourselves first !
DeleteThis is so good. I think Claudia is right. When we make music it happens in our spirit even if there is no one to hear.
ReplyDeleteI agree play as if no one is listening and your spirit will soar
Deleteamethyst skies that sing to me... sigh.. that's so dreamy :D
ReplyDeleteone of my favorite colors .. crystal of light
DeleteHi Truedessa - now I live looking out on the English Channel - I'm seeing a creamy golden moon - and those skies ... dark midnight blue ...
ReplyDeleteBut I love the art work - stunning ... and your poem certainly tugs the heart strings ... cheers Hilary
Hilary the view sound amazing, I think you have found a place of wonder
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ReplyDeleteOh I will .. even the dragon beating its tail against the ground... wonderful
ReplyDeleteBjorn I no doubt you would hear the thumping beat - thank you for listening
Deleteethereal music stirs every one....
ReplyDeleteI agree .. Play on
DeleteThe dragon is musical now? Bet I know one who will hear...
ReplyDeleteThe dragon is many things to a heart that hears it's magical tale.
DeleteOoops nearly miscounted there (didn't see the first line to the right) and was about to say - there are only 6!
ReplyDeleteThe contrast between the song in the heart and the dragon awakening is very nicely done -and yet both have a place in music.
Hi when I view the poem the 7 lines align. I am not sure how it appears on your end, but I am glad you found all seven lines. :)
Deleteamethyst skies and a sleeping dragon.....all leading to music within the soul. Love it!
ReplyDeleteamethyst skies and a sleeping dragon go well together.
DeleteSure a song that each of us have, moving to our own beat as it lives on repeat.
ReplyDeletePat, we all have a song or seven that plays in our hearts.
DeleteHopefully someone will hear the melody. I really admire the opening verses Truedessa~
ReplyDeleteHopefully, someone will hear as I am sure the melody is wonderful.
DeleteMmm. You bring back awesome memories on the piano with this one. Ah... Now I'm all nostalgic and want to go sit down for a couple hours and play.
ReplyDeleteHi Crystal, I bought your book and will be reading it after I finish Pat's book.
DeleteOoh, I like this. Though, I've never read anything you've written that I didn't like.
ReplyDeleteWow, thanks Sandra, that brought a smile to my face.
DeleteLove the dragon imagery! As long as we hear our own song, what does it matter if others don't?
ReplyDeleteGood point - every song could be our own song...
DeleteThere are rules in poetry. First and foremost: the poet makes the rules. Pretend it's what you meant to write, and let us, the readers, struggle to catch up (or is it struggle to ketchup?). Beautiful music in your poem!
ReplyDeleteWell, I've been known to break a few rules and get my hand slapped.
DeleteDid he say there are rules in poetry?
ReplyDeleteHe did and sometimes rules and I don't get along in poetry.
DeleteI'm wondering about dragon's musical dreams....cool!
ReplyDeleteI am wondering about dragon dreams as well :)
DeleteThis is so completely gorgeous! Loved every magical line.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sherry!
DeleteOh, I love the dragon and all it conjures.
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