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| Truedessa's Collection |
In a warm sanctuary flutters life
life, a continuous circle of change
change, like the seasons we all do
do, you feel safe wrapped in a cocoon
cocoon, silken covering of protection
protection, so we might heal and grow
grow, so we might sprout strong wings
wings, to carry our dreams skyward
skyward, we look for new possibility
possibility, brings forth transformation
transformation, consciousness emerging
emerging, a unique creature in the journey
journey, evolving in the center of the heart
heart, filled with hope, joy and love
love, the key to a changing world!
love, the key to a changing world!
sharing with Poets United
trying some Loop Poetry
Beautiful! Like how the last word led the next sentence as the poem grew.
ReplyDeleteHi Alex, it is called loop poetry. I visited a butterfly sanctuary in early spring and enjoyed the beauty that fluttered about in that steamy room.
DeleteSuch an interesting form!!
ReplyDeleteThat it is and I just had to try it!
DeleteWhat a challenging form... love how you did it.Love the sense of transformation here.
ReplyDeleteLife is about transformation..
DeleteThis is such an intriguing form and you have executed it oh so beautifully :D
ReplyDeleteThanks Sanaa
Deletecool form; quite opening like the cocoon itself until the final metamorphosis...the transformation is truly uplifting... beautiful...
ReplyDeleteThe cocoon offers warmth and a chance to rejuvenate.
Deleteloopy lovely Trudessy. Thank you for dropping in and my Sunday Lime today
ReplyDeletemuch love...
Thanks Gillena! I am a bit loopy :)
DeleteOh, WOW!!! How I love this! Loop poetry looks wonderful, I must try it. I love most how your poem so beautifully describes the journey of transformation. Loved every perfect line.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sherry! The journey of life I guess..
DeleteThe repetition of the last word to the first word of each line felt like glue - a resolve of spirit and a strong foundation upon which to transform
ReplyDeleteeach word building up to the final transformation...
DeleteYou have created a remarkable sense of progression with the repeating words, and the lines guide us along the path of finding hope in love. Such a powerful message.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kerry, I believe love is a powerful source of energy.
DeleteA loopdy loo at your zoo haha had to. Love can sure help out a ton as it can loop around to everyone.
ReplyDeletehaha - You made me smile as you know I am a bit loopdy loo...
DeleteYour poem has an optimism about the world that is truly needed today. I enjoyed the Loop Poetry. I will have to try one of these sometime.
ReplyDeleteI have to hold on to the belief that the world will change for the better at some point.
DeleteI absolutely loved this poem and form...Loop Poetry. This I must try....so much meaning as we ponder each word!
ReplyDeleteThanks Donna this form was new to me, but it just felt right today.
DeleteOne day perhaps I'll try a loopy! I loved how you built up to such a great message at the end.
ReplyDeleteThank Old Egg, go ahead and try a loopy I will be sure to read it :)
DeleteLovely words set in a wonderful form ... a beautiful metamorphosis of a poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you Wendy :)
DeleteLoop poetry! That is a nice way of making things seem near than they are! Great way of expression, True!
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Hi Hank,
DeleteI recently found this form and I thought I'd try it. Thanks for visiting!
I think the world needs this poem in light of recent events :)
ReplyDeleteI think I'd agree with you Keith.
DeleteThe form is very appropriate for your subject matter.
ReplyDelete(I thought I invented this form in 1992 – and in a way I did, as I never encountered it anywhere else until recently. But I didn't give it a name, or publicise it – except by including a poem I wrote like that in one of my books. And I only ever wrote one poem that way. Loop poetry is a very good name for it. I wonder how many poets create their own forms, new to them, only to find that others have created the same ones? I suspect it happens quite a lot.)
Hi Rosemary,
DeleteI went back to check the source and it was created by someone named Hellon in 2009. It looks like you invented it before Hellon :)
I rarely write in any specific form, but this one I may try. The loops mimic how our minds work, in loops connecting our thoughts. But the content here is what most impresses me. I like the hope you weave through this, the faith that transformation is possible. I consider this a prayer for us as individuals but also for the world. I think this is my favorite of yours now.
ReplyDeleteMyrna thank you for the lovely comment! I am so glad you could hear the words as a prayer of some sorts.
DeleteReally interesting form. It worked well, I believe.
ReplyDeleteThanks Susan
DeleteLovely poem. I like how all the sentences connect.
ReplyDeleteThanks Misha
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