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| Dancing in the rain Adrian Borda |
it's been a while
since I've seen your smile
your words echo in moments of silence
I can still feel the pain & joy in the rain
I'll talk to you when I can
it's been a while
since we shared our thoughts
I gave you my heart, my soul
I let you into my secret world
It's been a while
since we dared to dream
caught in the magic of words
sleeping in sheets, curled
It's been a while
since I've seen your smile
your words echo in moments of silence
I can still feel the pain & joy in the rain
I'll talk to you when I can...
It's been a while
since, I've heard your songs
entwined in the beauty of us
in stillness, our notes
swirled
It' s been a while
since, you drifted
away
I'm still here, waiting to fly
in the wings,
curtains furled
It's been a while
since I've seen your smile
your words echo in moments of silence
I can still feel the pain & joy in the rain
I'll talk to you when I can...
It's been a while
since, I sent you a smile
hope in a luminous sky
forgiveness in a misty pearl
Let us dance again and feel the rain!
Let us dance again and feel the rain!
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Such bittersweet memories of a love lost.
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting Alex!
DeleteThis iS a song, superb
ReplyDeleteThank you for hearing the melody!
DeleteI feel the nostalgia and the wistfulness, the wishing again for what was, the hopefulness. Nicely penned, Truedessa.
ReplyDeleteThanks Mary
DeleteThis is so sweet! I especially like this stanza:
ReplyDelete"It's been a while
since, I sent you a smile
hope in a luminous sky
forgiveness in a misty pearl"
I guess to get a smile you have to give a smile :)
DeleteSo much longing in this song, still so much hope of a wonderful embrace that will come back again
ReplyDeleteThanks for listening!
DeleteThe past can sure always hold a fondness indeed
ReplyDeleteYes, it can!
Deletethe yearning is so palpable...
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting Sumana
DeleteIt's been a while
ReplyDeletesince, I've heard your songs
entwined in the beauty of us
in stillness, our notes swirled
Sigh I love this soo much!!❤️
Thanks Sanaa for letting me know what part you enjoyed.
DeleteSuch a great image, dancing in the rain. And all of the longing that comes with this.
ReplyDeleteDancing in the rain can be freeing!
DeleteSo very beautiful. I love the repeated lines. You painted such a contrast between sleeping in sheets curled, and the wings sadly fueled....but hoping to fly. Sigh.
ReplyDeleteHi Sherry, I hope you are well?
DeleteIt's been a while, but the memories linger on.
ReplyDeleteLove the forgiveness pearl.
Forgiven as is a gift a pearl from the heart I guess
DeleteThis would be a sad tale if it were not for the beauty of your writing style. You did an excellent job
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Martin!
Deleteyes - you leave us with some hope at the end!
ReplyDeleteEvery song should have a bit of hope!
DeleteThis is wonderfully crafted. There is longing in it, but it is tinged with bitter-sweetness ... more sweet than bitter, I think. Beautiful writing.
ReplyDeleteThe twists of life can be bittersweet..
Deletethe refrain really brings out the longing in the poem.
ReplyDeleteis this a structured or form poem? it's very neat. :)
Hi, I didn't use any particular form for the poem as I was thinking more lyrical. Thanks for asking :)
DeleteNice use of the rhythmic repetition. Makes me feel nostalgic.
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading and taking the time to leave a thought :)
DeleteO the longing here! I can feel the speaker's ache.
ReplyDeleteGlad it came across..
DeleteSuch sad yet sweet nostalgia! Nicely crafted.
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