Thursday, March 13, 2014

Door Softly Creeks




















door softly cr eeee ks  on worn hinges
lub dub  heartbeat  races in anticipation
each craCKing step bringing you closer
rhythm of  shoes echoing in the hallway
earthly scents circulate winter's night air
slipping beside me, feeling your warmth
tickling my ear,  sweet gentle whispers
tracing outlines featherlight fingertips
trees whistling playing a catchy melody
holding hands, warm lips move together
listening to our bodies sway soft sighs


posted for dVerse..writing poetry without the
sense of sight..hosted by Brian


41 comments:

  1. First of all, that is quite some photo. It looks like the hands of two different people. I like the word play in the first few lines. Especially the craCKing step, which really shows it like it is. And the ending of the poem is ever so sensual. The warm lips, etc. -- beautifully penned.

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    1. Hi Mary,

      Thanks for visiting always a pleasure to read your thoughts..

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  2. Passionate & full of gentleness ~ Liking the sounds & sighs here very much ~

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    1. Thanks Grace I always appreciate your kind comments.

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  3. Don't need eyes to feel such heart strings taking flight, whether day or night, a little whisper in the ear and soft sighs will come near. Shoes in the hallway you say, you know I can't take them off at my bay lol

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    1. The sound of shoes in the hallway
      you wear them always????

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    2. Can't live without my eyes
      Scared of many goodbyes
      Of hearing too many lies
      Don't want to focus on cries
      Coming from deep down inside
      Without my eyes I just want to hide

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  4. smiles...it is a gentle intimacy in your words...between the two...but also with the world...a contentedness in among everything....that kinda love i think gives a greater appreciation of the world around us as well...

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    1. Thanks Brian..I always enjoy reading your thoughtful comments..

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  5. Wow, I didn't even notice you weren't using sight. Well done!

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    1. Hi Alex,

      Thanks for such a lovely comment..

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  6. Innocence and secrecy. Really lovely.

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  7. cool use of sense of touch here...and i do like the whistling trees a lot

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    1. I do enjoy the language of trees..thanks..

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  8. Two people within the one feel for each other. Touching makes the connection with no sights necessary for relief. Nicely Truedessa!

    Hank

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    1. Thanks Hank...always nice of you to visit..

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  9. A very sensual poem, Trudessa! I like your use of onomatopoeia at the beginning of your piece.

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    1. Thank you Gabriella I tried to incorporate sound..

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  10. Very very sensual poetry here - absolutely lovable.

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  11. I really love the romance and sensuality here. Quite a romantic scene you painted.

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    1. So nice of you to come for a visit :-)

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  12. Very romantic...holding hands can be so intimate and such a gesture of love.

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    1. the warmth of hands brings comfort..

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  13. Fingers can be like hearts, touching each other...~ nice play with words

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  14. It amazes me how all the senses come alive in this sensual piece, without the help of vision.

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    1. Victoria, thank you for reading my poem..

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  15. At first, I thought the creaking door and anticpating heartbeat described something ominous and was pleasantly surprised as my reaction changed to fit your words. Well done.

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    1. Thanks I wanted to give the piece a bit of suspense..

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  16. I like the anticipation of the door opening, the sound of the steps and then the sensuality of touch. A nice build up. Lovely :)

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    1. Thank you for letting me know what you liked..:)

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  17. So perfect! Just love this.

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    1. Thank you so much..comments are always appreciated..

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  18. Is anticipation a "sense"? Can certainly feel that in this piece! Lovely.

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    1. I think you can feel anticipation..thank you..

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    1. smiling..thanks for visiting..

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