Sunday, December 7, 2014

Behind Flowering Walls

photo by Elene Usdin
watching 
 flowering walls 
 soft bed lush rose landscape
wondering  do  you notice  me
 wilting


for Magpie Tales #249 
form cinquain 
sharing with Poets United

58 comments:

  1. I really like this.

    Thanks for coming by to visit.

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    1. Hi Gail,

      You are my first visitor thanks for dropping over and you are welcome. I hope you are doing well.

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  2. Nicely done


    ALOHA from Honolulu
    ComfortSpiral
    <3

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  3. A little rosey sneak and peak? lol

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    1. haha - sneaking around a bit here and there..

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  4. "do you notice me wilting"---ooh...very profound....and what a great play of words with the image of flowers on the walls.

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    1. thank you for the comment much appreciated..

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  5. Too bad, so sad. The sense of dejection of those with such a plight! Nicely Truedessa!

    Hank

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    1. Hi Hank,

      She looks so sad peeking into the room I tried to capture what she might be feeling.

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  6. This was so sweet and lyrical. I hope someone does notice the wilting!

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    1. One can hope someone notices..thanks for visiting..enjoy your break.

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  7. Short, to the point, and beautifully written. I hate when I feel all wilted even when I'm surrounded by lush, happy things.

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    1. I guess sometimes life has its moments...hopefully you will always bloom :)

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  8. the wilting amidst the blossoming flowers has an extra edge to it... and i do hope they notice...

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    1. Sometimes all it takes is one person to notice...

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  9. I love that last word. Caps it nicely. Bravo!

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  10. "Wondering do you notice me wilting".....wow! Fantastic!

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  11. Wonderful.. So much said in se few words.

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  12. Very touching. True for many...
    Well expressed!

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    1. Sadly that is true for many..thanks for the visit

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  13. such an interesting place to hide :)

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  14. Yes, sad to watch the weather and fade untapped life!

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  15. Oh the wilting when we look outside ourselves to be noticed...but we do need that recognition from others....nicely done!

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    1. Thank you..that is true I think sometimes we need a bit of sun..

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  16. Quite sad really! Reminds of the novelette "The Yellow Wallpaper."

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    1. Hmm, I don't think I know of this novel. I will have to look it up. Thanks Mary

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  17. Great image, Truedessa! It makes the wilting and lack of notice more poignant.

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    1. Hi Gabriella,

      Thanks for the visit..

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  18. I didn't expect that last line. It wrapped it up so clearly. Good writing.

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    1. Always a pleasure to read your comments :)

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  19. Oh...wilting... pity...we, women have to be more than that! ;)x

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  20. Well done...thanks for sharing

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  21. short but expertly written...x

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  22. excellent- she is wilting isn't she!

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  23. Excellent! Short and sweet:)

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    1. Short and sweet works for me..

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  24. oy, when wilting
    we all want to be noticed
    before too late...

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    1. Brian,

      That is true, but who will notice?

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  25. I do hope she's noticed before it's too late!

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  26. I hoped someone would mention the wallpaper...

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    1. The wallflower sometimes is hard to notice..

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    1. Ah, thank you blue what more could one ask for?

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