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| photo by Elene Usdin |
watching
flowering walls
soft bed lush rose landscape
wondering do you notice me
wilting
flowering walls
soft bed lush rose landscape
wondering do you notice me
wilting
for Magpie Tales #249
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I really like this.
ReplyDeleteThanks for coming by to visit.
Hi Gail,
DeleteYou are my first visitor thanks for dropping over and you are welcome. I hope you are doing well.
Nicely done
ReplyDeleteALOHA from Honolulu
ComfortSpiral
<3
Thank you!
DeleteA little rosey sneak and peak? lol
ReplyDeletehaha - sneaking around a bit here and there..
Delete"do you notice me wilting"---ooh...very profound....and what a great play of words with the image of flowers on the walls.
ReplyDeletethank you for the comment much appreciated..
DeleteToo bad, so sad. The sense of dejection of those with such a plight! Nicely Truedessa!
ReplyDeleteHank
Hi Hank,
DeleteShe looks so sad peeking into the room I tried to capture what she might be feeling.
This was so sweet and lyrical. I hope someone does notice the wilting!
ReplyDeleteOne can hope someone notices..thanks for visiting..enjoy your break.
DeleteShort, to the point, and beautifully written. I hate when I feel all wilted even when I'm surrounded by lush, happy things.
ReplyDeleteI guess sometimes life has its moments...hopefully you will always bloom :)
Deletethe wilting amidst the blossoming flowers has an extra edge to it... and i do hope they notice...
ReplyDeleteSometimes all it takes is one person to notice...
DeleteI love that last word. Caps it nicely. Bravo!
ReplyDelete"Wondering do you notice me wilting".....wow! Fantastic!
ReplyDeleteThanks my dear friend..
DeleteWonderful.. So much said in se few words.
ReplyDeleteThanks Bjorn..
DeleteVery touching. True for many...
ReplyDeleteWell expressed!
Sadly that is true for many..thanks for the visit
Deletesuch an interesting place to hide :)
ReplyDeleteinteresting indeed..
DeleteYes, sad to watch the weather and fade untapped life!
ReplyDeleteInteresting response..
DeleteOh the wilting when we look outside ourselves to be noticed...but we do need that recognition from others....nicely done!
ReplyDeleteThank you..that is true I think sometimes we need a bit of sun..
DeleteQuite sad really! Reminds of the novelette "The Yellow Wallpaper."
ReplyDeleteHmm, I don't think I know of this novel. I will have to look it up. Thanks Mary
DeleteGreat image, Truedessa! It makes the wilting and lack of notice more poignant.
ReplyDeleteHi Gabriella,
DeleteThanks for the visit..
wonderful !
ReplyDeletethank you
DeleteI didn't expect that last line. It wrapped it up so clearly. Good writing.
ReplyDeleteAlways a pleasure to read your comments :)
DeleteOh...wilting... pity...we, women have to be more than that! ;)x
ReplyDeleteA bit stronger perhaps :)
DeleteWell done...thanks for sharing
ReplyDeleteshort but expertly written...x
ReplyDeleteThank you Kay..
Deleteexcellent- she is wilting isn't she!
ReplyDeleteWilting petals..
DeleteExcellent! Short and sweet:)
ReplyDeleteShort and sweet works for me..
Deleteoy, when wilting
ReplyDeletewe all want to be noticed
before too late...
Brian,
DeleteThat is true, but who will notice?
I do hope she's noticed before it's too late!
ReplyDeleteThat is true..
DeleteI hoped someone would mention the wallpaper...
ReplyDeleteThe wallflower sometimes is hard to notice..
DeleteI notice you.
ReplyDeleteAh, thank you blue what more could one ask for?
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