Sunday, July 31, 2016

Victor Hugo - Transcends Time


Truedessa's Collection



A poet's soul longs for the mystic sea
collecting mementos, each picked with care
box of treasures, rose shells enchanted thee
waves of emotions, hidden pearl so rare

collecting mementos, each picked with care
10:10 tiny clock, the hour locked in time
waves of emotions, hidden pearl so rare
unlocking mystery, a bell does chime

10:10 tiny clock, the hour locked in time
partly threaded bracelet, preserving dreams 
unlocking mystery, a bell does chime
Victor Hugo, sets a romantic scene

partly threaded bracelet, preserving dreams
on distant shores, a wanderer did roam
Victor Hugo, sets a romantic scene
poetic verses, form in ocean foam

on distant shores a wanderer did roam
composing tales, a journey of yearnings
poetic verses, form in ocean foam
arousing dreams, thy heart is discerning

composing tales, a journey of yearnings
box of treasures, rose shells enchanted thee
arousing dreams, thy heart is discerning
a poet's soul longs for the mystic sea 

Author's note: This was written to bring
honor to this small treasure box, which
was found in an old family trunk.
I guess it was waiting for me!

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38 comments:

  1. I love the title and the whole description of the treasure box is charming. I also admire your rhyme scheme, which has something of the sestina in your use of recurring words. This must have been a painstaking piece of writing.

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    1. Thanks Kerry, I often have trouble with titles. It took a bit of time to write, but I wanted to capture the magic of the contents of the box.

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  2. This is a difficult form to execute.. love the soft tone and the time locked at 10.10...gives it such a great feel.

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    1. Thank you, there is actually a very small clock which read 10:10

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  3. This is absolutely gorgeous..!

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  4. wowzers for both content and form...the closing stanza is most beautiful..

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    1. Sumana, thank you for your thoughts, I just wanted to share the beauty of the treasures.

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  5. this must be a difficult form to do!
    i like the image of the clock, the hour hand locked in time. 10:10 does look like a smile. :)

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    1. Ha - I hadn't thought of it as a smile. Thanks i like that image you have provided.

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  6. "10:10 tiny clock, the hour locked in time"

    I LOVE this line!

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    1. There is a small time piece hidden in the box, time stood still at 10:10...

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  7. Wonderful tribute to that box your mother gave you. You described the gathering and the thoughts so well.

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    1. Thanks Alex, I was very surprised when she brought this gift over for me and I knew I had to give honor to my ancestor.

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  8. Very cool capture of your treasure box tru...you pieced this together very nicely

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    1. Thank Brian,the words seemed to come together sort of magical, but I did have a form in mind as I wanted to give it an olde world feel. I am not sure I did that :)

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  9. Great capture of the box indeed. Oh where the contents must have been and what they've seen.

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    1. Hi Pat, If that box could only talk. I am sure it would have some wonderful stories to tell.

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  10. What a gorgeous find, this treasure Box! I love the repeated phrases throughout the poem. Is this an actual form, or did you repeat them where they sounded right to you? It makes for a very lovely read.

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    1. Hi Sherry, Yes this is an actual form the Pantoum. It is a bit tricky I have tried it before and it just sort of spoke to me so I ran with it. The box is delightful, I am trying to track down how old the box might be. I think it is an old cigar box.

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  11. What a lovely, mysterious and really evocative thing to come upon in an old trunk. Truly a treasure chest - and I love where it took you, poetically.

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    1. It was a wonderful gift as I carefully looked through the box at all the intricate items. The timepiece stuck at 10:10 really was amazing.

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  12. Oh, this is so sweet Trudessa. The repeated yearning of a poet's heart, the references to Victor Hugo. Brought me back many years when, as an undergraduate, I majored in French and actually read him in French. The years have erased so much of that language from my memory. I so much enjoyed reading this poem. Hope you enjoy the treasure box.

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    1. There has been some synchronicity with Victor Hugo in my life. He has shown up in a few places.

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  13. I like how this treasure box now when found can connect the past of family with the present owner... ~ wise write.

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    1. That is true, as I ponder who the box belonged to in the family and I think she was sentimental and a bit romantic.

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    1. It brought a smile to my face Rosemary.

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  15. The repetitions are just perfect. Form poetry always laughs at me and my free verse ways, so this poem is even more impressive to be because of that. I also love the descriptions.

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    1. Hi Magaly, free verse is easier and I like the freedom, but for this one I just wanted it to have an old world flavor.

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  16. These are indeed mysteries full of glee,
    they were waiting for you trying to break free.

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    1. that may well be
      from sea to sea

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  17. One can well imagine what grand stories they may tell. Victor Hugo is a treasure trove to keep.

    Hank

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    1. Yes, I have will keep this box of wonder.

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  18. Hey there, Truedessa,

    And a treasure that be
    For all to see
    The magic unlocks
    From the wondrous box
    Nice pawetry
    From thee
    Victor Hugo
    Way to flow.

    Pawsitive stuff
    As I do ruff

    Penny, Penny, pawet for many...

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    1. Penny how pawsitively wonderful for you to visit:)

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  19. So glad you found the box... that evokes such beautiful words from you.
    ZQ

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