Thursday, September 15, 2016

Clerihew - Elvis


 
 Rockin' with Elvis Presley
swiveling hips expressively
wrote him a note love me tender
unfortunately, it was returned to sender


writing a Clerihew
so here is my version
Thanks for visiting

57 comments:

  1. This is awesome. You managed to control the rhythm well. That's where I had trouble.

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    1. I thought you did a good job with yours. This was a fun prompt!

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  2. Wonderful biography in so few words!!

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    1. It's amazing how that came due!

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    1. return to sender - heartbreak hotel!

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    1. perhaps it was suspicious minds

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  5. The rhyme worked well and I liked the way you incorporated his songs.

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  6. I have learned something here today. Thank you.

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    1. Thanks for visiting - hope you learned something good!

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  7. Remember that guy, Elvis Presley,
    who liked guns like that Naked guy, Leslie?
    He'd wiggle his hips, then BANG! shoot his 'telly'
    when the news mocked his King-sized um.... belly.


    Wink-wink ;)

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    1. haha - love it

      Elvis was his name
      he shot up to fortune and fame
      he sang about heartbreak hotel
      then he rocked the jailhouse cell

      wink-wink - let's tattoo it with ink :)

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  8. In his Blue Suede Shoes he may be in Blue Hawaii or perhaps in Bora Bora with Blue for company!

    Hank

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    1. In his Blue Suede Shoes
      he made all the news
      bora bora beach
      now in his reach!

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    2. Howdy, Hank!
      The Poetry Tank

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    3. Howdy Blue
      How are you?

      Hank

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    4. Tired but good!
      Not even in a cranky mood...

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  9. Love the play on the returning to sender... good way to express it.

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  10. So clever! The inclusion of a couple song tireless was brilliant. ..and flowed naturally.

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  11. haha a fun play with hips that sure sway

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    1. haha - swiveling hips make the day..

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  12. I liked "return to sender" as the answer to "love me tender".

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    1. haha - I guess he never opened the note

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  13. This is clever. Made me smile.

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    1. Glad it brought a smile Sherry!

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  14. Cool prompt and very clever use of Elvis's songs for this poem. I like structure as well, short but powerful and fun.

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    1. Thanks for coming over to read the poem!

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  15. Gayle Walters RoseSeptember 16, 2016

    Really fun, Truedessa, and great job on your Clerihew!

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    1. Thanks Gayle, I really enjoyed the prompt and there were so many great poems to read.

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  16. Soooo glad you posted Truedessa! Love this one -- especially since I was a bonafide member of the Elvis Presley fan club in my day! :) And sadly, I never got a response to my letter to him either. I actually had a pink plastic/leather like Trapper Keeper -- although I think we just called them notebook binders, that had a picture of him on the front! And I also remember begging my folks to stop the car and buy one of those Elvis on velvet paintings that were for sale by the bedspreads on the side of the road as we drove every summer to Florida to vising my grandmother. Thanks for the memories!!! :)

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    1. Hi Lillian, I've never seen Elvis, but a friend of mine is an Elvis fan and I wrote this with him in mind, I knew he would enjoy it.

      You were a real fan. So sorry you never received a response from Elvis that would have been wonderful!

      Glad my little poem brought back such wonderful memories for you!

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  17. Wow, T,--nice to have you joining in--& look at the impressive queue of responses. Loved you brevity & levity, but wanted to have more, including hound dogs, all shook up, in the ghetto, & blue suede shoes!!

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    1. Good Morning Glenn,

      This one was fun to do, so many songs to choose. "Blue Suede Shoes" that could
      amuse my muse.

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