Sunday, April 26, 2015

Rushing Waters

pic Truedessa's collection


can you hear the rushing waters call 
on a  mountaintop snow melts away 
dreamers gather come one come  all 
  
under starlight our world  feels small 
caught in the magic,  branches sway 
can you hear the rushing waters call 

amidst  trees, spirited deer stands tall
healing souls as distant drums play 
dreamers gather come one come  all 

shimmering stardust begins to fall 
chasing away thoughts dark and grey
can you hear the rushing waters call 

tears flows down a mountain wall   
forming a stream with rock and clay 
dreamers gather come one come all 

in silence the white horse does neigh
bursting over the horizon a new day 
can you  hear  the rushing waters call 
dreamers gather come one come all 

sharing with Poets United 
I wrote this while on a mountaintop
thanks for taking the time to visit..

35 comments:

  1. Beautiful.... I can feel all the images described in such vivid and rich tone in this magical piece...! :D
    Lots of love
    xoxo

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  2. Ah!! the lap of nature and a poem in tow, the best way to go:)love the pic too!!

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  3. Having all around, with noting but rushing waters, dreamers and nature found, would sure be peaceful indeed. Set the stage at your feed.

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  4. oh i def. can hear their calling... a lot of magic in those rushing waters... and a good place to dream

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  5. Love, love, love it....How you began and continued the same lines throughout drew me down that river....and hearing the rushing water fall from the mountains is such a spiritual experience indeed.

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  6. What a wonderful Villanelle.. The way the streams are calling, I get the feeling of melting snow of spring and hope. I'm dancing to your words,

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  7. can you hear the rushing waters call

    That's the beauty of the Villanelle. Repeating lines keep the flow of movements mobile and moving. Great write Truedessa!

    Hank

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  8. Beautiful. I understand the call of nature but could never describe it so well. Hope of spring is a wondrous thing.

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  9. That flows even better than the rushing waters themselves!

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  10. love the images you use.. they feel like home.

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  11. I totally get that because water is one of my favorite ways of finding peace in nature. Beautiful poem!!!

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  12. How cool to take time to write poetry when on a mountaintop. No wonder this poem just felt so authentic -- It must be wonderful to look down at those rushing waters and up at the shimmering stardust!

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  13. Rushing waters indeed - and beautifully realised here, with the effective use of repetition - reminded me off my recent spectacular visit to a waterfall - Thank you With Best Wishes Scott www.scotthastie.com

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  14. This villanelle calls so beautifully....it flows to the sound of nature...the reader almost feels like she/he is on the mountain with you. Beautiful.

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  15. i am humming with the nature's song. lovely description - the sounds of the flower water are very therapeutic

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  16. Your poem reminds me of fresh Swiss streams, their strength and rushing sounds. Great use of form!

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  17. This is a lovely scene from nature, beautifully sketched. You've captured some wonderful, almost dreamlike images here. I really enjoyed this post!

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  18. So beautiful and captivating reminding me of times exploring the beautiful wild country.

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  19. Hi Trudessa - I could feel your mountain top, and then the rushing waters through the wooded and rocky land ... lovely - cheers Hilary

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  20. Ahhh, all of my favorite things about nature. You know, I never thought of a waterfall as a mountain's tears. I just assumed they were always happy. :)

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  21. authentic! A perfect experience to share.

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  22. Well done, love the villanelle. Evocative.

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  23. Love rushing waters...hear it...ah!...also like ' spirited deer' ~ appropriate form for water/words flow...

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  24. Be sure to stop by today, Truedessa - I have a surprise for you!

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  25. Perfect "flowing" logic!

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  26. Can indeed hear those waters falling :)

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  27. You paint such a lovely setting!

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  28. This reminds me of the mountains near our home. Well done.

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  29. Dreamers gathering in a stardust shimmering world....my kinda poem!

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  30. Hey Trudessa,

    I wish my rushing waters had got me here quicker. Maybe that didn't sound right :) What I mean is that I'm sorry for my recent inconsistent commenting nature.

    I relate to this in my own way. Your words doth flow and flow in more ways than one. Just outside my new place is a creek. Alone at night, the tears from eyes mingle amongst the rushing waters.

    Thank you, my kind friend.

    Gary :)

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  31. Beautiful! I love the rhythm... it is like water rushing and paints a gorgeous picture.

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