In sorrow the willow will always weep
opening her heart , tears softly flow
crying for a world that has fallen asleep
planting seeds, waiting for dreams to reap
under moonlight her slender branches glow
in sorrow the willow will always weep
protecting precious secrets you keep
hidden in her trunk in the earth below
crying for a world that has fallen asleep
awakening silence she counts lost sheep
across the river the wind does blow
in her sorrow the willow will always weep
some will fall the mountain is too steep
darkest nights, will the blackbird crow
crying for a world that has fallen asleep
hope in a horizon, sun begins to peep
will today be the day that love will grow
in sorrow the willow will always weep
crying for a world that has fallen asleep
opening her heart , tears softly flow
crying for a world that has fallen asleep
planting seeds, waiting for dreams to reap
under moonlight her slender branches glow
in sorrow the willow will always weep
protecting precious secrets you keep
hidden in her trunk in the earth below
crying for a world that has fallen asleep
awakening silence she counts lost sheep
across the river the wind does blow
in her sorrow the willow will always weep
some will fall the mountain is too steep
darkest nights, will the blackbird crow
crying for a world that has fallen asleep
hope in a horizon, sun begins to peep
will today be the day that love will grow
in sorrow the willow will always weep
crying for a world that has fallen asleep
pic Claude Monet - Weeping Willow
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At dVerse writing Villanelle - hosted by Grace
I've never tried this before, so I am not sure
if I nailed it or not..
I've never tried this before, so I am not sure
if I nailed it or not..
I think you nailed it. You made the willow alive, like a real person.
ReplyDeleteThanks Alex, it was a bit of a challenge..
DeletePoor Willow... lovely images in the poem!
ReplyDeleteHi Dezzie, thanks for visiting..I must go see what the spy has found.
DeleteYou've found what I think of Willows and crafted it into words, form and beauty.
ReplyDeleteThank you Gail, the willow is a special tree for me so symbolic in my life.
DeleteNailed it indeed, the poor willows weep for all but their trunks keep them standing tall
ReplyDeleteHi Pat, the willow is flexible and able to bend with the wind..standing tall through storms.
DeleteYou gave the weeping willow character & emotions ~ I like the refrain:
ReplyDeletein sorrow the willow will always weep
crying for a world that has fallen asleep
Lovely job with the rhyming verses ~ Thanks for joining in Truedessa ~ Wishing you Happy Easter ~
Thanks Grace for an interesting prompt.
DeleteWishing you and yours a Happy Easter!
You totally nailed it. I love that you chose a weeping willow, a significant tree to me. Yes, she will always weep. We both had a mountain too steep in our poems, too, LOL...great minds.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sherry, it was a challenge and I did notice we both referenced crows and mountains..lol..great minds indeed..Have a great weekend.
DeleteA poet's silver hammer goes to thee that nailed it; ah, yes; a nearly perfect response for a virgin effort, my goodness; a tribute to your talent & grasp of difficult form. A grand theme, very touching, with strong refrain lines, & inspired rhymes. I like the lines /protecting precious secrets you keep/hidden in her trunk in the earth below/.
ReplyDeleteHi Glenn,
DeleteThis really took some work on my part..thank you for your kind words. I do love the weeping willow trees they are gorgeous and symbolic. Perhaps, they weep so we don't have to...
choosing crying for the world to have fallen asleep was perfect for your repetition because it's powerful and it makes a good refrain.
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Thanks..we need to wake the world up to events that are happening. Have a wonderful weekend.
DeleteSo beautiful! I've always liked weeping willows but your poem makes them come alive more...weeping for a world that is asleep...oh my! I can't believe this your first villanelle. I am truly envious for the capturing this form and crafting so beauitully.
ReplyDeleteI think the subject helped me on this one as I am passionate about the weeping willow.
DeleteParticularly like the following lines:
ReplyDeletecrying for a world that has fallen asleep
awakening silence she counts lost sheep
The alliteration in the first line is a bit of a tongue-twister for me, but there is something so fascinating about weeping willows - and that painting fits so well with your poem.
Hi Marina,
DeleteThank you for visiting..a bit of a tongue-twister, but then the weeping willow is complex..
Brought the weeping willow to life! You definitely nailed it - no doubt!
ReplyDeleteThanks Anthony...it was an interesting prompt..
DeleteThis is beautiful and haunting. I love that your b rhyme-scheme also rhymes with willow and sorrow. Peace, Linda
ReplyDeleteThanks Linda ..peace to you as well..
DeleteThis is so lovely, and animated!
ReplyDeletewell matched to the image, too ~
ReplyDeleteThis painting really speaks to me and I adore willows.
DeleteBeautiful. Love your story of why the willow weeps
ReplyDeleteThank you...I am sure the willow holds many stories.
DeleteBeautiful language and imagery--I found it quite moving.
ReplyDeleteThank you...
DeleteLove the melody cry-like of willow....nice for the pic
ReplyDeleteThanks humbird..she cries in a gentle breeze..
Delete"Crying for a world that has fallen asleep"---this is absolutely lovely and rather apt in this day and age. Beautifully worded and the whole villanelle sounds lyrical to me, like the willow is singing or something. Great write.
ReplyDeleteThank you C.C for the lovely comment..I wanted to convey her song..thanks for hearing it..
DeleteThe painting, poem, theme and tears flow together so beautifully, Truedessa...sigh
ReplyDeleteLynn thanks for visiting and I am glad you enjoyed my humble poem
Deletenice - this really worked for me
ReplyDeleteRight on. Love these villanelles about weeping willows and black birds. This is imagery and metaphor that I too love to read and write!
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