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Once, I dreamt in fields of green
in a world where all seemed serene
following the tune of a magical harp
today, the blades of grass feel sharp
my heart aches and poetry hurts
thoughts are tumbleweeds in the desert
of my wandering mind....
written for dVerse
hosted by De
writing a 44 word quadrille
incorporating the word "sharp"
Thank you for reading!
I haven't been around much, recovering from a bad case of covid….
Tumbleweed thoughts would be painful indeed. I love the visual this gives those blades of grass.
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Thanks De, for hosting its been a while since I linked in with a poem. Feels good
DeleteWhat a great poem. The contrast really works.
ReplyDeleteThanks Dwight
DeleteAs we mature, we also discover that all is not "fields of green", there are hurts most every month.
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Reminds me of Rem lyrics:
DeleteEverybody Hurts
Don't let yourself go
'Cause everybody cries
Everybody hurts sometimes
Great use of contrast and rhyme, Truedessa, and I love the idea of thoughts as tumbleweeds in the desert of a wandering mind.
ReplyDeleteThanks, I do feel thoughts tumble around for a bit here and there…
DeleteNot just in wandering minds either. It's impossible to be entirely serene, knowing what we do of the world.
ReplyDeleteJane so true, many places are experiencing droughts and have no blades of green.
DeleteWow!!!
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed your rhyming quadrille, Truedessa
Much♡love
Thanks Gillena! Have a wonderful day…
DeleteVery sorry you are sick!
ReplyDeleteThanks Alex, its been a rough 3 weeks
DeleteHi there! This immediately made me think of elephant grass. Probably because I've been editing my Vietnam novel. A lovely little quadrille. BTW, I love REM!
ReplyDeleteI just googled Elephant Grass. Those blades are tall, one could get lost in that grass. Good luck with your book!
DeleteI love your quadrille! With the right melody ... you created wonderful lyrics for an enchanting song.
ReplyDeleteThanks Helen, I think I can hear a song
DeleteSo sorry you caught covid. Glad to see you writing a poem. I love "Once I dreamt in fields of green...."
ReplyDeleteThank you, my friend.
Delete"my heart aches and poetry hurts".....this line made me pause
ReplyDeleteI love the way this poem transitions using the landscape.
The last 3 weeks everything hurts. But, I finally had energy to compose a poem.
DeleteI can feel the sense of a mind of covid slowly awakening... I hope you are recovering well.
ReplyDeleteThank you Bjorn, it’s been a rough journey. The fog is lifting.
DeleteOh no. Please feel better soon.
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Thank you Sandra I am taking one day at a time. This has been terrible.
DeleteLovely rhymes in first four lines
ReplyDeleteThanks Dezzie
Deletelovely poem get well soon
ReplyDeleteThank you, on the road to recovery
DeleteLove thoughts as tumbleweeds. Feel better soon.
ReplyDeleteYes! My how experiences can turn, and the feelings that ensue so powerful.
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