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Sobbing the day the beaded necklace broke
tiny colorful pieces held together by a thread
sitting in my car under a giant old oak
a forewarning a deep feeling of dread
I knew in that moment things had changed
tearfully, gathering the small precious beads
perhaps, some re-threading and re-arranging
pondering where this new road would lead
black crows perched above on a tree limb
caw, caw, cawing as if mocking my sadness
this was a sign that trouble would soon begin
and my world would unravel in madness
Sobbing the day the beaded necklace broke
severing all that I held dear to my heart
cupped in my hand colorful beads of hope
mending what remained, a new work of art
written for dVerse Poetics Getting Hooked
hosted by Kim - writing poetry with an opening hook
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I love that you hooked me with an image, Truedessa; I imagined the beaded necklace, the ‘tiny colorful pieces held together by a thread’, an omen. I also love the crows and the final line, the hope of ‘mending what remained, a new work of art’.
ReplyDeleteVery sad but a great analogy.
ReplyDeleteA strong feeling of change and dread in those opening lines, and the structured rhyme of the poem reinforces that sense of an order that is stressed and broken. Very fitting to the prompt, and to so many other things.
ReplyDeleteYou have written so well the foreshadowing of things to come, exemplified by the breaking of the string of beads and the black crows. So well done.
ReplyDeleteawww ... sit here while i get you a nice cup of tea and a hug! <3
ReplyDeleteThis is quite moving! Beautifully done, Truedessa!
ReplyDeleteI love how it started with brokenness, then ended with mending, with hope, and a new work of art. Love this one!
ReplyDeleteThat was beautiful, Truedessa! You really captured the emotion!
ReplyDeleteYvette M Calleiro :-)
http://yvettemcalleiro.blogspot.com
Such a poignant use of analogy in this one 💙💙
ReplyDeleteWow. Very expressive and moving, True.
ReplyDeleteSandra sandracox.blogspot.com
This is such a strong way to tell a story.... so much more broken than the necklace that really is untold...
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