Sea of Dreams!
You and I in a sea
of dreams
night cries in the wind
bed of clouds,
wispy thin
starlight in our
eyes
sing to me in
harmony
under the solar
flares
of my inner dreams
I now lay my soul
bare
blanket me with
melodies
soft as the velvet
sky
your voice, rich
and sweet
tucking me in to
sleep
slowly reaching
for you
touching your face
just one kiss from
thy lips
a dream within a
dream
eyelids
heavy, swimming
on the waves of
emotions
we gently rock and
sway
songs of devotions
You and I in a sea
of dreams
voices sigh in the
wind
misty sprays of
passion
love everlasting..
This is a passionate voice ~ I specially like these lines:
ReplyDeleteblanket me with melodies
soft as the velvet sky
your voice, rich and sweet
tucking me in to sleep
Hi Grace,
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a sea of dreams does not sound like a bad place at all...love the sing over me melodies....like a lullaby of love to take me to sleep and to dream even deeper...smiles.
ReplyDeleteHi Brian,
DeleteThanks for the nice comment..like a lullaby of love..I like that line..thanks again..
Sounds like a softly, cradling place that sea of dreams...lulling, singing, joining...beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for the comment. The water always gives me a sense of comfort and a topic that touches me.
Deleteeyelids heavy, swimming
ReplyDeleteon the waves of emotions
we gently rock and sway
songs of devotions.....dreamy and beautiful write.
ayala, thanks so much for the kind comment.
DeleteA soft sweetness to this writing. Vunerable.
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading my work!
DeleteThis is a beautiful and romantic poem. I love 'a dream within a dream.'
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Mary!
DeleteYou have that gift of taking a reader right (ZIP!) into your "dream world". Nicely constructed and well-written. I enjoy discovering rhyming words of which each are NOT in their traditional end-of-line cushy spot. E.g., in first stanza: night, starlight...and cries, eyes.
ReplyDeleteGlad you dropped by Fourth Dimension, get to read a Peep new to me!
Hi Steve, So nice of you to drop in and leave such a nice comment. I am a bit unconventional in my writing but, it works for me and I am so glad you enjoyed my arrangement.
Deletenice..this has a dreamy feel...blanket me with melodies...hmmm..nice..melodies are wonderful blankets, arent they..
ReplyDeleteClaudia, Always nice to see you here. Thanks!
Deletenice. I like this lullaby/lyrical vibe here. Really nice choices to effectively deliver the metaphors and imagery. Nicely done. Thanks
ReplyDeleteHi Fred, I am glad you could pick up on the lyrical vibe as I originally wrote this with a song in mind. I hear the melody playing in my head. Again thanks!
DeleteTo be lost in such a sea, sounds great to me. Like the atmosphere you set too.
ReplyDeleteHi, Thanks for stopping in lost at sea is a great place to be.
DeleteBeautiful write! I especially enjoyed the last stanza!
ReplyDeleteHello,
DeleteThanks for the nice comment! Always appreciated.
Beautifully written piece about the comfort of love and dreaming alongside your loved one. Well, that is how I interpreted it. Thanks for visiting and commenting on mine.
ReplyDeletePamela
Thank you and yes, I do enjoy a good dream or should I say a dream inside a dream. You are welcomed I enjoyed your work.
DeleteThe melody and rhythm here in these passages are reminiscent of a song.
ReplyDeleteHello,
DeleteI am happy you could feel the song quality as it really is a song in my heart and always will be. Thanks so much!
There is a rhythm to this that rocks like a boat-- I sense a sway as I "sing" the words--no, in fact, I am actually swaying in my chair! Nice evocative dream! ~ Jason
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DeleteThanks so much for your kind words..glad you could feel the sways.
very beautiful
ReplyDeleteThanks so much!
DeleteDreamy. The swell of words carries you along like a melody.
ReplyDeleteMark,
DeleteThanks so much for your kind expressions of my work! Nice to meet you..