Beautiful Blemish
You are my sweet
addiction
a lovely high on a
low day
wanting nothing but, to
feel you
running through my veins
the one my heart
craves
my body quakes and
quivers
for your gentle touch
You are my love
addiction
my deepest
affliction
haunting me in my
dreams
reaching out from
beyond
I'm lost within
your arms
wanting you more
each day
what can mere
words say
my heart on
display
You are my sweet
addiction
my deepest
affliction
surrendering my
emotions
to you my spirit
yields
filled with loving
devotion
You are my sweet
addiction
the cure to my
compulsion
three simple words of
conviction
I Love You!
Just beautiful. Loving someone and having love returned is a wonderful addiction.
ReplyDeleteHi, Thanks for the comment..I've been on love binge lately..
DeleteSweet addiction indeed :) Beautiful !
ReplyDeleteayala, Thanks so much!
DeleteA beautiful write!
ReplyDeleteSo glad you stopped by and thanks for the comment.
DeleteNot a bad addiction to have for sure, so far haven't been spell bund or sucked into any love allure haha
ReplyDeletePat, lol..well you better watch your back or you might get caught like a fish on a hook..as always nice to read your blog and comments.
DeleteA sweet write, I like the repetitive lines ~ They reinforce the feeling of sweet addiction & dedication ~
ReplyDeleteGrace, Thanks so much!
Delete...crazy love that must be.... i once been there and i tell ya everything around scenting like opium, or sort of like that, too addictive... too sweet... too dangerous... yet i dared risk for it... smiles...
ReplyDeleteThanks for the read and reply..I agree scents can be addictive..
DeleteThis made me miss my hubby (who is away on business) soooo much! :)
ReplyDeleteHi, Well hopefully, that hubby will return soon and shower you with affection.
Deletelove is def a sweet addiction...running through your veins...smiles...love is crazy good like that....smiles...nice verse....
ReplyDeleteHi Brian,
DeleteThanks for the drop by and the reply. Always appreciated.
beautifully penned. Such a wonderfully worded ode to love. Really enjoyed. Thanks
ReplyDeleteFred,
DeleteThanks so much and I'm glad you could feel the emotions.
The rhyme and repetition are nice. The haunting and dreaming is a theme I've been reading a lot of lately. Some of the most beautiful writing is born from desire that hasn't been touched.
ReplyDeleteHi Jessica,
DeleteThanks for the thoughtful words..I have been studying dreams and dream works there is some powerful knowledge in our dreams..
Lovely....
ReplyDeletesreeja - Thank you!
DeleteTerrific pace and flow to this one. It almost reads like lyrics to a song. Only con crit, not sure I like the ending, (but for a good reason!) because the rest of the poem is so unique that the final line seems awkward. Still, that hardly diminishes your work. Nice job, poet!
ReplyDeleteHi Mark,
DeleteThanks so much for the reply and the crit..any suggestions on how you would have ended it? I played with it a bit and that is how the pen moved. I thank you for you kind words and for the following. Welcome to the wanderings of my mind.
Not sure how I would end it, actually! ^_^ Also, I deleted my G+ account in reverted back to my standard blogger profile. dynamic views sucked. haha
DeleteHi, Glad you changed your blog view..so I guess I will leave the poem as is...thanks for the message..
DeleteBeing in love is like an addiction, some times it is good, and other times not so. Beautifully penned.
ReplyDeletePamela
Thank you so much for reading and the reply. Your words are appreciated!
DeleteI swear I thought you were talking about addiction to alcohol--see? A one-track mind! But I Loved it, no matter the interpretation.
ReplyDeleteExample:
"...my sweet addiction
a lovely high on a low day
wanting nothing but, to feel you
running through my veins"
"...my heart craves
my body quakes and quivers."
You are my love addiction
my deepest affliction
haunting me in my dreams
reaching out from beyond
I'm lost within your arms
"...wanting you more each day..."
"...my sweet addiction
my deepest affliction"
Can you see what I mean? 'Cause I'm a recovering alcoholic Peep!
Thanks for your kind words today...very supportive.
Hi Steve,
DeleteThanks so much for reading my work and for sharing your deep thoughts on this piece. I guess addiction holds the same fundamental traits whether it be love, alcohol or substance abuse. Its about the craving..I can see where you are coming from and I am glad I could be supportive in some small way..taking one day at a time..I hope all your days flow with ease and wish you peace in your daily journey..