Thursday, February 13, 2014

Dreams like Pennies in a Jar



Under moonlit sky we go for a drive
radio playing, sitting side by side
shimmering stars, a few clouds in the night
weatherman said it would rain but,  he lied
love I give to you free, keep your wage
dreams like pennies in a jar I have saved
woven memories, stitched by hand I made
remove your mask, I long to see your face
lovingly we embrace, our wounds we nurse
healing, within our spiritual church
finding sweet bliss, to deny  would be worse
forgiveness,  deposits in our soul's purse

sighing, lightening life's load from our back
true love tattooed, we will remember that

posted for dVerse Bout Rimés  creating a poem with these end words:  drive, side, night, lied, wage, saved, made, face, nurse, church, worse, purse, back, that..
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  1. Brian MillerFebruary 13, 2014

    ha the weatherman always lies....love that healing of wounds within your spiritual church...forgiveness deposited in the souls purse...another cool line....well played...

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 14, 2014

      Well, we can't blame the weatherman..as I know one who says it is hard to predict..thanks for visiting and you are usually number one
      under my sun..stole that rhyme from the cat..lol..

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  2. AnonymousFebruary 13, 2014

    romantic - well done ~

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  3. Cressida de NovaFebruary 13, 2014

    A loving poem for Valentines Day...well done!

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  4. stephFebruary 13, 2014

    that weatherman.. how do they hold on to their jobs? So often wrong.. but the rest of it.. so nice and loving.. for a Happy Valentine's Day..

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 14, 2014

      Thank you..well, I think the weatherman can have a hard time nailing down that weather pattern..but, had to use the line..smiling

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  5. ClaudiaFebruary 14, 2014

    smiles...good that the weather man wasn't right and you could enjoy that walk without rain...it's good to nurse those wounds... a romantic write

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 14, 2014

      Hi Claudia,

      It is good to nurse those wounds then you can heal..

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  6. Kathy ReedFebruary 14, 2014

    Good to read a positive romantic outcome with the words a bit tricky, but you streamlined it nicely..

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 14, 2014

      Thank you a bit of challenge with the word choice.

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  7. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2014

    Realy enjoyed this; you say just the right amount in your lines and leave the rest to our imaginations ... smiles

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 14, 2014

      Thank you, I enjoyed the prompt a bit of challenge to fit the words in just so..

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  8. Marina SofiaFebruary 14, 2014

    Ha, at last a happier poem with those tricky end-rhymes - well done for turning it around!

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 14, 2014

      Thank you Marina..I am romantic so had to twist it to reflect
      some loving thoughts..

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  9. Alex J. CavanaughFebruary 14, 2014

    Wow, you would never know those were words you had to use - they fit so well in the poem.
    And the weatherman always lies...

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 14, 2014

      Good Morning Alex,

      Thanks for coming over for a read..how is the ninja wannabe? Still reading your book CassaStorm about half way through soon I will need to buy book 2.

      Have a good day!

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  10. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2014

    Wow!!! I really loved this poem! The rythm and intensity of love is felt so powerfully. It was realy dreamy and good :) Such a deep connection, a sulful tie with someone must be profoundly heartwarming *.*

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 14, 2014

      Thank you for such a lovely comment..much appreciated

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  11. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2014

    This is really beautiful! I love the dreaminess of it. You are very talented :-)

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  12. Sherry Blue SkyFebruary 14, 2014

    I so love "dreams like pennies in a jar I have saved" . A wonderful poem of love for valentine's day. Am off to the beach today for the weekend. Yay! Waves!

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 14, 2014

      Sherry,

      Thank you my friend..hope you enjoy your ocean..

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  13. Vandana SharmaFebruary 14, 2014

    romantically crafted

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  14. Pat HattFebruary 14, 2014

    The weatherman lies away
    But mother nature does have its way
    A drive within life
    Free from strife
    Releasing dreams two go
    Together as the dreams flow
    Nursing such wounds to health
    Pennies to dreams brings true wealth

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 14, 2014

      Mother nature sure does have her way
      causing turmoil on any given day..
      following dreams is the way to be
      listening to the whispering trees..

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  15. Glenn ButtkusFebruary 14, 2014

    In WA state, along the the coast, weather forecasting is simple; if you can see Mt. Rainier, it will rain soon; if you can't see it, it's already raining; a sterling piece this, both the use of the words & the form.

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 14, 2014

      Glenn,

      That is a sure way to forecast the weather..thank you for the nice comment. I do like this particular form thanks for noticing...

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  16. brudbergFebruary 14, 2014

    The weatherman always lie.. but I love how your managed to manoeuvre around those words that could create sadness.. and kept it sweet and loving

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 14, 2014

      Well, Bjorn I am a romantic so I would need to weave some love into the poem...

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  17. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2014

    Such a sweet and romantic poem. I really liked the gentle flow of it.
    -HA

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  18. BeachannyFebruary 14, 2014

    This poem has an aura of faerie dust but its glitter doesn't deny the truth of what is said. Sometimes it's better to let love happen even if it breaks your moral standard because to deny it is even more immoral and wicked. Well said and beautifully written.

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 14, 2014

      Thank you so much such a lovely comment..

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  19. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2014

    you wove a wonderful poem around the words. Nice to see the happy ending too!

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 14, 2014

      thank you was fun to write and I like happy endings...

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  20. Kathryn DycheFebruary 14, 2014

    true love tattooed, love that . . . and those darn weathermen always lie.

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  21. Optimistic ExistentialistFebruary 15, 2014

    Wow your poetry is truly spectacular. I especially loved the ending of this one :)

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 16, 2014

      Hi Keith,

      Thanks for coming over to read...hope you are doing well with your recent disconnect..

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  22. RMPFebruary 15, 2014

    beautiful. this flows quite stunningly. you did a nice job incorporating the given words.

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  23. dsFebruary 15, 2014

    Beautiful. I especially enjoyed "dreams like pennies in a jar." Thank you.

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  24. Blue GrumpsterFebruary 26, 2014

    If we removed ours masks... would the world be a better place?
    Or do we need them to preserve our space?

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    1. TruedessaFebruary 27, 2014

      Interesting question..are masks a way of survival????

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