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| The Wind and Sun - Fable |
A traveler walking steady his path in life
from afar powerful wind and sun
observed
weathered cloak protecting him from strife
facing numerous trials he never swerved
Mighty wind blows, cold
brushes raw skin
shaking off chills,
pulling his cloak tighter
facing forceful element,
determined to win
thinking of her, harsh journey a bit lighter
Behind dark clouds, sun peeks it's head
light warms soft flesh, loosening her cloak
sleeping under a tree, tulips bloom soft bed
thoughts of him, in gentle silence she woke
Eyes wide open, his silhouette comes in view
baring his soul slowly removing worn cloak
two reaching higher dreams vast sky of blue
freeing wild spirits, breaking yellow yoke
which is a greater force the sun or the wind?
Writing Fables at dVerse..Bjorn is hosting
based on the fable "The Wind and the Sun"
moral: Kindness effects more than severity
I put my own spin on the fable..
quite like this take on the old tale ~
ReplyDeleteThank you so much it was rather fun to write.
DeleteLove the poetic voice of this... The moral of this is great.
ReplyDeleteThanks Bjorn, Enjoyed the prompt.
Deleteah so very true...the gentle warmth of the sun is much more powerful than a harsh wind when it comes to opening up...
ReplyDeleteAgree, I will take the warm sun any day...
DeleteBeautiful! :-)
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ReplyDeleteGreatly done!"
nice...i am familiar with this one
ReplyDeleteit is not force that wins
but warmth
love wins
and that is a beautiful thing.
smiles.
Hi Brian,
DeleteWarmth wins as kindness can move mountains...
Positive is stronger than negative. Well done!
ReplyDeleteIndeed it is positive energy is a force that I
Deletelike to dwell in...thank you for visiting.
I love the romantic and passionate twist in the ending ~ Better the gentle hand rather than forceful element ~
ReplyDeleteBoth you and Gayle wrote of the same fable, smiles ~
Thanks Grace,
DeleteA gentle hand can mend hearts..
The elements in ones path
ReplyDeleteTry and bring down their wrath
But moving forward for the win
And maybe a soon a little sin lol
Wins the day every time
Beneath there tree love chimes
Moving forward the way to go
Deletelet go of inhibitions at one's show
beneath the tree two will sing
who knows what the future will bring
I love the beautiful detail that you colored your fable with...wonderful images. Did you love these fables as much as I did when I was a child?
ReplyDeleteThank you for the wonderful comment. I did enjoy fables as a child.
DeleteI really enjoyed the telling of this fable, Truedessa. It is one which is unfamiliar to me too, but your poem brought it to life.
ReplyDeleteHi Mary,
DeleteThanks so much..I remembered this one probably because the wind and sun were involved.
Ah - that's a great and very wonderful read. Loved it. Smiles
ReplyDeleteThank you smiles back..
DeleteGreat imagery and a fable well told:-)
ReplyDeleteThank you for visiting and leaving a comment.
DeleteThis is wonderful, though I am not familiar with the fable. I like his perseverance.
ReplyDeleteThanks, through perseverance dreams can become reality..
DeleteGood morning, you!
ReplyDelete~shoes~
and Good Morning to you!
DeleteI like it.
ReplyDeleteThank you..
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