Monday, July 13, 2015

Into the Horizon


steadily she follows the track
seeking light in an eastern sky
shadowy spirit dressed in black
steadily she follows the track
sun on her face, moon on her back
she missed the train it passed her by
steadily she follows the track
seeking light in an eastern sky

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33 comments:

  1. GailJuly 13, 2015

    I like this. The repetition seems to strengthen her determination.

    Thanks for visiting.

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    1. TruedessaJuly 14, 2015

      Gail, Thanks she is determine following the tracks into a new day. Appreciate you constant support here.

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  2. Maude LynnJuly 13, 2015

    I like the repetition, too. This has a great flow.

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    1. TruedessaJuly 14, 2015

      Thanks - I decided on a Triolet as I wanted the repetitive impact..

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  3. MELODY JACOBJuly 14, 2015

    nice
    new post: http://melodyjacob1.blogspot.com/2015/07/white-woodzee.html

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  4. KutamunJuly 14, 2015

    Lovely work ,dear , fsscinating concept , the dawn, my natural inclination is to sunset , because i was born then ....

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    1. TruedessaJuly 14, 2015

      Thanks - I couldn't decide if she should head to a western sky or eastern sky...but, thought better to walk into a sunrise..new life...

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  5. XJuly 14, 2015

    I like how each line begins with the same Ss sound, maybe like the hiss of the train steam - and hey, if you miss the train, you can still folow the trail. Good on her for following - as many would just say "I missed the train so I must stay"

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    1. TruedessaJuly 14, 2015

      ha - so clever of you hear the "ssss" sound...originally I was thinking of desert rattles..hissing in the darkness...

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  6. Pat HattJuly 14, 2015

    Determined to follow that track, even if the train is long gone. Have to get there, the way life should be.

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    1. TruedessaJuly 14, 2015

      I guess if one has a destination they must follow the path...

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  7. Sandra CoxJuly 14, 2015

    I hope she makes it to her destination.

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  8. Red ShoesJuly 14, 2015

    I like her hat... :-)

    ~shoes~

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    1. TruedessaJuly 17, 2015

      haha - Hi Shoes - that is one nice hat indeed...How are you my dear friend?

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  9. humbirdJuly 15, 2015

    Haunting story...leaves us puzzled...where's she going.... Thanks, Truedessa for stopping by :)

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    1. TruedessaJuly 17, 2015

      yw - humbird - I always enjoy reading your poetry...

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  10. AnonymousJuly 15, 2015

    The middle is my favorite:
    "steadily she follows the track
    sun on her face, moon on her back"

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    1. TruedessaJuly 17, 2015

      I think that is my favorite part as well..

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  11. Blue GrumpsterJuly 16, 2015

    Seeking light in an eastern sky... I used to do that.

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    1. TruedessaJuly 17, 2015

      Blue - I think you should still seek that eastern sky...it is where the sun rises..Hope you are well Blue...

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    2. Blue GrumpsterJuly 18, 2015

      Back in 2011, when the docs told me I was really ill, life-threatening even, I went outside the next morning and watched that sun rise. I did not take it for granted, I tell ya.

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  12. AnonymousJuly 17, 2015

    that is rythmic !

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  13. HelenJuly 17, 2015

    Yes, rhythmic ... perfect word to describe this.

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    1. TruedessaJuly 17, 2015

      thanks I like the sound of that word :)

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  14. The Blog of BeeJuly 17, 2015

    I too, like the flow.

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  15. Tess KincaidJuly 18, 2015

    Very creatively put together...

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    1. TruedessaJuly 20, 2015

      Thanks Tess for the interesting prompt

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  16. Kathe W.July 18, 2015

    I like the rhythm of repetition and the last line is perfect!

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    1. TruedessaJuly 20, 2015

      Thanks this form is Triolet and I thought it would work for the message I was trying to convey. Again thanks for the visit...

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