Tuesday, September 15, 2015

Fixer Upper


lost dreams
newly foreclosed
needs tender loving care
owners split in a pillow fight
for sale
~
doll house
dreams moved away
emptiness hangs on walls
what happened to the inner child
come home

posted for Mag 285
form: Cinquain
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27 comments:

  1. CloudiaSeptember 15, 2015

    wonderful poem





    ALOHA
    ComfortSpiral
    =^..^=


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  2. Pat HattSeptember 16, 2015

    Damn, who knew pillow fights could be so deadly lol

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 16, 2015

      haha - yeah you better watch those pillow fights they might turn nasty..

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  3. Strummed WordsSeptember 16, 2015

    The image of an old house does conjure up a lot of memories, ideas. Good one!

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 16, 2015

      True, and I think old houses all tell a story or two.

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  4. XSeptember 16, 2015

    I appreciate the pillow fight bit of humor, if only all fights were as gentle.
    Sad to see families fall apart.

    Come home or find a new dream to inhabit the room.

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 16, 2015

      haha - well the pillow fight would explain all those feathers...
      and it is sad when families fall apart. I guess they just need to try and pick up the pieces and move on.

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  5. GailSeptember 16, 2015

    Sad but good.

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 16, 2015

      Sad it is, but just look at that house it needs some care..How are you Gail?

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  6. Sherry Blue SkySeptember 16, 2015

    "Dreams moved away." So sad. And the closing question goes straight to the heart. Beautiful, my friend.

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 16, 2015

      Hi Sherry, we must keep that dream alive and let our inner child come and play...

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  7. LeoviSeptember 16, 2015

    Yes, really seems to be lost dream.
    Limbo Delirium
    Black & White Abstracts

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 16, 2015

      Well where one door closes another opens...it is the way it should be..

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  8. David Powers KingSeptember 16, 2015

    I bought a foreclosed home. Sadly wasn't treated very well.

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 16, 2015

      I am sure you gave it the needed care to make it a home. I read your book and it sure had me hooked.

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  9. Blue GrumpsterSeptember 16, 2015

    Fixer Upper... I expected this poem to be about um.... me. :(

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 16, 2015

      Hmm...the next one will be for you Blue..

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  10. kaykualaSeptember 16, 2015

    Dreams worked on together were dashed on a split. Life's tragedy repeated every so often. Pity! Great cinquain Trudessa!

    Hank

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 17, 2015

      The prompt filled me with a bit of sadness so I let the words spill the dollhouse had a story.

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  11. CifarSeptember 17, 2015

    beautifully penned

    My take : A Small Home

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  12. Ankita September 17, 2015

    beautiful and poignant cinquain :)

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  13. BerowneSeptember 17, 2015

    Fine, well written, poignant...

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 17, 2015

      Thanks Berowne, that was a tough one this week for me.

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  14. MichaelSeptember 17, 2015

    That's too bad

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 17, 2015

      I am sure it happens everyday somewhere...

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