Sunday, October 18, 2015

Satellite of your Eye



Under a million stars
I see the satellite of your eye
orbiting around my world

so close yet so far away
catching a rare glimpse
& I wonder do you see me in the morning dew

wiping the night's darkness from my eyes
so I might see your light passing by...
my heart beats faster

tell me do you see the mighty dragon hovering high
I hear his distant song,  a sweet melody of the heart
calling
 calling
  calling

I have
 fallen, fallen, fallen
under a magical spell....

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41 comments:

  1. CloudiaOctober 18, 2015

    Most effective repetitions!




    ALOHA
    ComfortSpiral

    (\__/)
    (='.'=)
    (")_(")

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    1. TruedessaOctober 18, 2015

      Hello,

      Thank you for visiting and bringing that Hawaii warmth.

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    2. A Beer for the ShowerOctober 18, 2015

      This poem was breathtakingly beautiful and all, and I always love when you bring in dragons, but I can't resist the charm of ASCII comment animals.

      ,,,=^.^=,,,

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    3. TruedessaOctober 18, 2015

      Haha - I don't know how you and Cloudia made these animals but, they are cute.

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  2. Sherry Blue SkyOctober 18, 2015

    This is gloriously beautiful!!!!!!!!!

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  3. Pat HattOctober 18, 2015

    With a dragon all could see, just don't go getting burnt to a crisp lol

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    1. TruedessaOctober 18, 2015

      Pat,

      You are funny, I guess one has to watch that fiery breath...

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  4. Rosemary Nissen-WadeOctober 18, 2015

    You took me with you! (Smile.)

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  5. Sandra CoxOctober 18, 2015

    Awww. Both beautiful and touching.

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  6. Alex J. CavanaughOctober 18, 2015

    Tamsin has indeed fallen under the Dragon's spell...

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    1. TruedessaOctober 18, 2015

      Tamsin - has her own story to tell one day...

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  7. MaryOctober 18, 2015

    Ah, Truedessa, this sounds like a wonderful magic spell! Leaves me breathless.

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    1. TruedessaOctober 18, 2015

      HI Mary,

      Sometimes there is magic in the air..

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  8. Old EggOctober 18, 2015

    When we look at the night sky we hope ardently there is someone looking back at us. This is a beautiful piece of writing.

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    1. TruedessaOctober 18, 2015

      Thanks Old Egg - There has to be more out there. How could there not be?

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  9. TruedessaOctober 18, 2015

    Thanks Loredana...I do enjoy fairy-tales..

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  10. Wendy BourkeOctober 18, 2015

    You have mastered repetition to great effect. A lovely little piece.

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  11. humbirdOctober 18, 2015

    Ah, this calling...haunting poem, Truedessa.

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  12. SusanOctober 18, 2015

    Ah, very nicely spaced--so near and yet far. One would hope that the orbit becomes a spiral, that the dragon clears the way.

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    1. TruedessaOctober 19, 2015

      Hi Susan,

      I like the idea of a spiral...

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  13. brudbergOctober 19, 2015

    Tantalizing - just like Bilbo you are cornered by the dragon

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  14. Sanaa RizviOctober 19, 2015

    Absolutely adore this - especially the repetitive verse which seems to add the magic touch to this poem. Beautifully executed :D

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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    1. TruedessaOctober 19, 2015

      thank you so much for your lovely comment..

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  15. Jae RoseOctober 19, 2015

    I suppose we can be drawn into a multitude of universes - perhaps love is a better option than many others..

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    1. TruedessaOctober 19, 2015

      I believe there are multiple universes and sometimes the power of love is great.

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  16. NatašekOctober 19, 2015

    lovely and deep.

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  17. AnonymousOctober 19, 2015

    I understand falling under a dragon's spell: breathtaking and magical,

    Elizabeth

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  18. Malia Craig Tagg Lawrence PageOctober 19, 2015

    smart orbit.

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  19. Gen Giggles October 20, 2015

    Having a special person in that orbit is a very good thing.

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  20. GraceOctober 20, 2015

    I like the refrain of calling and falling under the magical spell ~ Love the journey, smiles ~

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  21. klahanieOctober 20, 2015

    Hey Truedessa,

    Eye see what you did there and very nice it was :)

    Gary

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  22. David Powers KingOctober 21, 2015

    That pic reminds me of Sauron ... in space! :)

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