Sunday, August 6, 2017

Pieces of Sun, Slices of Moon

original artist unknown












open your mouth taste the rain
feel life pulsating in your veins
molding our thoughts into words
to the song of the mocking birds
riding a magical spinning wheel
layers of ourselves slowly peel
once again dancing in syllables
believing in dreams and miracles

listening to songs of yesterday

open your eyes, take in the sights
ride a dragon into a starry night
shaping our hearts, we can feel
show me something that is real
pieces of sun, slices of  moon
singing a tune in an ancient rune
in a tongue, that's never been sung
where a golden apple once hung

listening to songs of yesterday

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48 comments:

  1. H.R. BennettAugust 06, 2017

    I can just imagine this as a gentle song song by a fireplace on a summer's evening. Maybe a soft lute/harp being played along with it, but it just paints a wonderful image of fantasy, warmth, and wonder.

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    1. TruedessaAugust 06, 2017

      Thank you Robert, I can def hear a soft lute.

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  2. Alex J. CavanaughAugust 06, 2017

    Such a great rhythm to it! Just like a song.

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    1. TruedessaAugust 06, 2017

      Thank you Alex, care to give it a riff?

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  3. Sherry Blue SkyAugust 06, 2017

    I love "ride a dragon into a starry night". And the pieces of sun and slices of moon. Beautiful, my friend.

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    1. TruedessaAugust 06, 2017

      Thank you Sherry, we really do have to catch up soon!

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  4. SusanAugust 06, 2017

    Ah! To return to that freshness and inspiration!

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    1. TruedessaAugust 06, 2017

      That is true, the crispness of the imagination.

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  5. indybevAugust 06, 2017

    Delicious descriptive phrases. What a delightful read!

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  6. MaryAugust 06, 2017

    Truedessa, I like coming to your blog and finding there a way to escape..today the opportunity to ride a dragon into a starry night. And yes, in search of something that is real!

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    1. TruedessaAugust 06, 2017

      Thank you Mary that means a lot to me, I enjoy your blog and thoughts as well.

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  7. Wendy BourkeAugust 06, 2017

    A lovely cadence to this wonderfully rendered piece ... imbued with a cascade of mystical evocation images. Beautiful!

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    1. TruedessaAugust 06, 2017

      Thank you Wendy for you comment, I always enjoy reading what you leave :)

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  8. Pat HattAugust 06, 2017

    A great flow, but that you know. Be quite the ride as one goes out with the tide

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  9. AnonymousAugust 06, 2017

    You know I;m really with this. Let me compliment you of the floe you used to draw us in.

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    1. TruedessaAugust 06, 2017

      smiling - I think you might like to dance with syllables.

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  10. Wani SandersAugust 06, 2017

    Slice of moon very nice

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  11. Magaly GuerreroAugust 07, 2017

    In the past, I've already said how much I LOVE it when your poetry reads like a spell that married a nursery rhyme that married a fairy tale. I love this so much.

    I also adore that the words (the writing) is alive and living.

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    1. TruedessaAugust 07, 2017

      Thank you so much Magaly, you brought a smile to my face.

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  12. Gillena CoxAugust 07, 2017

    The reality of distant untouchable sun and moon heightens the quest in the dragon ride, i can taste this fantasy

    much love...

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    1. TruedessaAugust 07, 2017

      Sometimes, we just have to reach a bit higher in our dreams

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  13. Sumana RoyAugust 07, 2017

    This is so enchanting, from another world as it were! love the sun pieces, moon slices and most of all when "layers of ourselves slowly peel". Beautiful.

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    1. TruedessaAugust 07, 2017

      Thank you Sumana - I think it is good to peel a few layers so new growth can appear.

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  14. Hilary Melton-ButcherAugust 07, 2017

    Hi Truedessa - I'd love to ride the dragon into the starry night and then see the moon and sun in their various guises ... as perhaps the dragon and I rest under the tree where the apple once hung ... lovely poetry-song ... cheers Hilary

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    1. TruedessaAugust 07, 2017

      Thank Hilary - Close your eyes and take that magical ride in a dream.

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  15. Sanaa RizviAugust 07, 2017

    This is so incredibly breathtaking! Especially love; "open your eyes, take in the sights ride a dragon into a starry night shaping our hearts" and oh "show me something that is real pieces of sun, slices of moon singing a tune in an ancient rune." Beautifully executed.

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    1. TruedessaAugust 07, 2017

      Thank you so much Sanaa, always good to shape that heart shaped box.

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  16. Rosemary Nissen-WadeAugust 07, 2017

    This moves along at a jolly pace!

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  17. BlogorattiAugust 07, 2017

    I can taste each line, and trace each meaning, like fine lines across a soft face. Well done. A delight to read indeed.

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    1. TruedessaAugust 07, 2017

      Hope you were able to taste the flavor of each word..

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  18. Sandra CoxAugust 07, 2017

    As always....wondrous.

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  19. SnowcatcherAugust 08, 2017

    My goodness, how your poem today bends and intertwines with what I wrote today, even though I did not rhyme! I was do another visit back here; lack of 24-hour internet has caused me to forget how talented writers like you are! I'll have to thank Pat for re-introducing us!

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    1. SnowcatcherAugust 08, 2017

      Blends, not bends. :) hate typing on a phone!

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    2. SnowcatcherAugust 08, 2017

      Gosh, and due, not do. I think I'll go hide now...

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    3. TruedessaAugust 08, 2017

      Thanks Snowcatcher, no need to hide I'm just glad you stopped over.

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  20. Fundy BlueAugust 08, 2017

    Just lovely dancing in syllables, Truedessa! This poem has an enchanting mood, and I would dearly love to ride a dragon into a starry night!

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    1. TruedessaAugust 08, 2017

      Hi,

      Oh, I too would love to ride a dragon into a starry night. I think it would be pure enchantment.

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  21. R's RueAugust 09, 2017

    Love.

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  22. Sandra CoxAugust 09, 2017

    I love the opener: open your mouth taste the rain.
    So evocative.
    YOU, have a great one, True.

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  23. Lowcarb team memberAugust 09, 2017

    Really liked this, an enjoyable read,
    Thank you

    All the best Jan

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  24. Theresa MahoneyAugust 10, 2017

    I really enjoyed this piece. It feels so magical and enchanting. Just lovely!

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  25. humbirdAugust 11, 2017

    Hi True,
    your rhymes sound great!
    nice thoughts about moon & sun,
    inspiring by eclipses. Thanks for visiting my blog!

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