I'm amazed how the sedoka can be transfigured so that it can fit a myriad of poetic styles, from the public to the personal. Here, for example, is one where it's made intensely personal.
Such a song Can do no wrong Just let it flow And away you'll go To where I don't know Just don't stub your toe Or whack your elbow Maybe a lawn you'll mow
The first katuata reminded me of the beautiful ancient idea that the movement of the planets and stars created harmonic tones, the musica universalis. And then, moving into the harmonic tones of the heart in love--lovely!
of course i am now humming total eclipse of the heart...ha...songs that echo in your soul...those are def the good ones....surrender away...smiles.
ReplyDeleteHi Brian,
DeleteToo funny now we will be singing that song all night..thanks for the comment..
This is beautiful. It floats like a dream Truedessa.
ReplyDeletetypo in your title? Elcipse... I just did that the other day in one of mine...
Hello,
DeleteThanks for the lovely comment and also for the heads up. I just fixed it:)
I'm amazed how the sedoka can be transfigured so that it can fit a myriad of poetic styles, from the public to the personal. Here, for example, is one where it's made intensely personal.
ReplyDeleteThank you for visiting and the comment. The prompt was interesting and fun to do..thank you for that inspiration.
DeleteSuch a song
ReplyDeleteCan do no wrong
Just let it flow
And away you'll go
To where I don't know
Just don't stub your toe
Or whack your elbow
Maybe a lawn you'll mow
Hi Pat,
DeleteDo you care
to sing-a-long
we could sing
all day long..
always a pleasure
to have you as a guest
at my house..(smiling)
I can try
DeleteBut away you may fly
As I can't carry a tune in a bucket
But I say err umm duck it
We can be two out of tune
Deletejust singing the day away
would be fun to do.
The first katuata reminded me of the beautiful ancient idea that the movement of the planets and stars created harmonic tones, the musica universalis. And then, moving into the harmonic tones of the heart in love--lovely!
ReplyDeleteNico,
DeleteThanks you so much..what a lovely comment..I am moved by your words.
Smooth, sultry feel to this. Love it.
ReplyDeleteHello,
DeleteThank you for the lovely note. Hope you have a lovely day..
Like Samuel said, this form seems very well suited to a multitude of styles. This worked wonderfully. Great write! -Mike
ReplyDeleteMike,
DeleteThank you for the visiting and the thoughtful comment.
smiles...made the song total eclipse of the heart come to my mind... love the musical quality of your verse and the images work so well
ReplyDeleteClaudia,
DeleteGood Morning, thank you for feeling the music.
Deliciously romantic.
ReplyDeleteHi Paige,
DeleteThank you so much for the return visit.
Lovely romantic, sensual touch to this well-written sedoka, Truedessa.
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting and the lovely comment Victoria. I hope you have a beautiful day.
DeleteI feel the desire.Nice sedoka.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the read and comment.
DeleteWonderful in both symbolic and romantic ;-)
ReplyDeleteHello again,
DeleteThank you for your wonderful words :)