i need no reminder the cost
no weapons halt what has begun
the final golden coin gets tossed
i need no reminder the cost
battlefield, who will be lost
seeking hope in a rising sun
no weapons halt what has begun
i need no reminder the cost
no weapons halt what has begun
the final golden coin gets tossed
i need no reminder the cost
battlefield, who will be lost
seeking hope in a rising sun
no weapons halt what has begun
i need no reminder the cost
Over at dVerse creating a poem
around one line from Brian or
Claudia's poem. I chose Brian's
poem "if i stay"
around one line from Brian or
Claudia's poem. I chose Brian's
poem "if i stay"
Wow, you really took Brian's line and ran with it! Powerful statement for something indeed too "costly." Well done.
ReplyDeleteHi Ginny,
DeleteThanks that line just jumped out at me so I had to give it a run.
Battle is always too costly - well done!
ReplyDeleteBattles are often costly on many levels. Thanks Alex!
DeleteYou made a strong point in this poem, Truedessa. The cost IS high.
ReplyDeleteThe cost is higher than we can imagine.
Deletethe cost on the battle field is too great, when we are talking about war for sure...i wish the guys in charge would not toss that coin as if it cost so little....
ReplyDeleteI agree a costly toss ...I was going to go another angle with this the cost of love..
DeleteA cost that is often too high, in so many different ways. I like the way you repeat Claudia's line in your poem.
ReplyDeleteThanks Gabriella, that was Brian's line..smiling..always appreciate your visits.
DeleteOh, that golden coin....it gets tossed in many a game in life!
ReplyDeleteThat is does and one never knows how it will land.
Deletethe cost is too great in so many way... powerful write; packs a punch in few words :)
ReplyDeleteand I wonder are we ready for such a costly expense..
DeleteShort but really says so much in just a few lines. Each time we think we know the costs... and yet we don't, or wilfully disregard them.
ReplyDeleteThat is true and I wonder will we ever learn
DeleteOh I loke how you used Brian's line to a triolet,.. And so effective - the cost is always high.
ReplyDeleteThanks Bjorn the cost is high and has a ripple effect..
DeleteA very effective use of the line to make a very effective poem.
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting Rosemary..
Deletethe cost is high... and the repetition works very well and ups the intensity as well... i just don't hope that it gives three points for bri then...hahah... smiles
ReplyDeletehaha - I didn't think about that when I wrote a triolet..Are we allowed to write more than one..that cat line of yours really speaks to me as well..
DeleteThe proliferation of firepower will always make battles imminent!
ReplyDeleteHank
There have always been battles since the earliest of times. The choice of weapons have greatly changed through the hourglass..
DeleteThere would be a lot fewer wars if it required the heads of states to duke it out to the death instead of armies!
ReplyDeletehaha - that is true..
DeleteThey cost in many a way, but they keep on waging on, never ending cycle.
ReplyDeleteBattles will always continue in the fight for power a never ending cycle.
DeleteThe cost is immense. Sad, that although we know this, war wages on as if it were a necessary part of humanity. Your poem makes a powerful statement.
ReplyDeleteThanks Myrna - Unfortunately, war is a reality in an ever changing world.
Deletethe repeated refrain is very effective - such a great cost indeed
ReplyDeletethanks, Brian's words are the refrain..
DeleteI like the different response -this one of the price of war ~ Its too high, I agree ~
ReplyDeleteI wonder when or if war will ever end???
DeleteFantastic. It says it all, briefly and potently.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sherry
Deleteevery day now, we hear the sabers rattling; fear & profiling stirred up in our coffee--moving the war on terror into its second decade, the VA/military hospitals full, & so are the cemeteries.
ReplyDeleteThe hospitals are full and still so many are wounded needing care and sad about the cemeteries.
Delete"no weapons halt what has begun"...a powerful line about the futility of violence to solve problems. Powerful use of Brian's line.
ReplyDeleteI wonder what can stop what has begun?
DeleteVery creative, made those words your own - the repetition was powerful!
ReplyDeletethank you...I just felt the words..
DeleteThis is very powerful, accentuated by the shortness of the poem.
ReplyDeletethank you for visiting..
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