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In moonlit yellow dream
between cat-tails
blue guardian, remains
untouched deep
darkness whispers
solitudes wish
heaven bound
beyond the veil
harps & lutes
spiritual songs
mourns hope
born yesterday
palmed rose
sharp thorns
beauty & pain
cosmic souls
in the hearts brow
one can truly see
what is essential
"love"
linking with dVerse
hosted by Laura
She wants us to select exactly five of the “charms” from a list taken from the poem The pale Impromptu”
Dim Accuracy; Candle salve; Consumed moon;
Eyes jealousy; Fouls deviation; Grey life;
Hearts brow; Lucid farrows; Nulling marrows;
Painted mirth; Pale heat; Palmed rose;
Pearls from tissue; Pellucid quest; Royal flesh;
Skulls of saints; Slime pigments; Spiritual songs;
Solitudes wish; Times chant; Yellow dreams;
I chose the following,
spiritual songs, yellow dream, hearts brow, palmed rose, solitudes wish
Very nicely done! I like the format of your poem.
ReplyDeleteThanks Dwight,
DeleteSo beautiful. I like the format, too. It adds to the content. Beautiful words.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sherry, the visual presentation either descends or ascends depending on perspective, fragmentations of life and death
DeleteLOVEly phrases strung like pearls!
ReplyDeletePearls strung with care
DeleteSuch a beautiful shape to your poem. The Little Prince would agree with your last stanza <3
ReplyDeleteThere is wisdom in “The Little Prince” and I love a good story!
DeleteI agree with Lisa, your poem has a beautiful shape and progression, Truedessa.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kim,
DeleteDo words shape our thoughts or do shapes create images of thought?
I enjoyed the flow and your skill in incorporation the phrases given.
ReplyDeleteThank you Francis, simply constructed fragmented thoughts the missing pieces are up the interpretation.
Deleteyou have shaped this poem so well and I especially liked the opener - the visuals are lovely:-
ReplyDelete"In moonlit yellow dream
between cat-tails
blue guardian, remains
untouched deep"
Thank you Laura, the prompt was interesting!
DeleteThat's a wonderful way to depict it.
ReplyDeleteIt’s where my mind wandered.
DeleteLovely poem!
ReplyDeleteThank you ayala! Nice to see you again.
DeleteI love how you connected the palmed rose with the thorns... love hurts.
ReplyDeleteBjorn, it indeed hurts sometimes it is just too painful
DeleteBecause the night belongs to lovers...
ReplyDeleteI think it does Dez!
DeleteThis is gorgeously rendered! Love the shape of the poem and how seamlessly you have incorporated the charms 💝
ReplyDeleteThank you Sanaa
DeleteYou wove your word choices in purrfectly. Though, of course, I'm not surprised:)
ReplyDeleteThank you Sandra always nice to see you here.
DeleteA connection like no other as you weaved your words.
ReplyDeleteConnected in dreams
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