Sunday, October 27, 2013

Riverbed Gently Rocks

le Jardin, 1962, by Max Ernst


I sleep
mother earth's womb
naked submerged blue water
nurtured, loved, spiritual growth
I thirst

I dream
ripples of hope
riverbed gently rocks
vision take root within my soul
I stir

I wake
flowing heartbeat
embracing wondrous love
river eternal energy
I live

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41 comments:

  1. UnknownOctober 27, 2013

    Beautiful poem! Enjoyed the journey from the womb to the flowing heartbeat!

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  2. brudbergOctober 27, 2013

    Oh what a beautiful set of cinquain... well done.

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    1. TruedessaOctober 27, 2013

      Bjorn,

      Always appreciate your words and visit.

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  3. Brian MillerOctober 27, 2013

    nice...i like your correlating this to the earth...and the river of life...very cool....

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    1. TruedessaOctober 27, 2013

      Brian,

      Thanks, I always like reading your comments. Hope you enjoyed your day.

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  4. humbirdOctober 27, 2013

    Very vital, productive form,showing growth within the earth...love the poem.

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  5. Sherry Blue SkyOctober 27, 2013

    So beautiful, the awakening, the love in that "river (of) eternal energy".

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    1. TruedessaOctober 27, 2013

      Hi Sherry,

      Awakening to new life a river is so cleansing.

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  6. Pat HattOctober 27, 2013

    Like the progression you took
    Here at your nook
    From sleep and dream
    To alive and in loves stream
    Way to be
    At your blue sea

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    1. TruedessaOctober 27, 2013

      A journey along the river of life
      comes in many stages...

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  7. KatherineOctober 27, 2013

    This was so beautiful....it flowed just like that beautiful blue river!

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    1. TruedessaOctober 28, 2013

      Good Morning Katherine,

      Thank you for your kind words ..have a wonderful Monday..

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  8. TALONOctober 27, 2013

    Each, on its own, is beautiful and perfect. Together, the flow is magnificent.

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    1. TruedessaOctober 28, 2013

      Good Morning Talon,

      Thank you for stopping over for a visit and the lovely comment.

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  9. Vandana SharmaOctober 28, 2013

    Different emotions expressed perfectly!

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    1. TruedessaOctober 28, 2013

      Vandana Thank you for visiting and the lovely comment.

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  10. NatašekOctober 28, 2013

    very tender poem... beautiful.

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  11. MaryOctober 28, 2013

    I enjoyed the flow and feeling of this poem, Truedessa. I especially enjoyed the last stanza.

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  12. JinksyOctober 28, 2013

    Love the progression of the lines beginning with 'I'...

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  13. gautami tripathyOctober 28, 2013

    Keep writing!

    erosion

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    1. TruedessaOctober 28, 2013

      I'll try to keep writing as long as the muse is willing..

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  14. AnonymousOctober 28, 2013

    This sounds and feels mythic. Something I truly enjoy.

    Elizabeth

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  15. Mademoiselle ModelleOctober 28, 2013

    Just beautiful.

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  16. LynOctober 28, 2013

    Perfect...I feel the entire journey..

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    1. TruedessaOctober 28, 2013

      Lyn, thanks for visiting and the kind comment.

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  17. AnonymousOctober 28, 2013

    I like how the three verses beat like a heart with their varying line lengths :-)

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    1. TruedessaOctober 28, 2013

      Hi Steve,

      Thanks for pointing that out I hadn't thought about the shape resembling a heart beat...

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  18. BerowneOctober 28, 2013

    Pleasing and quite elegant...

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  19. Silent Otto October 29, 2013

    What a vision it is.....

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  20. Sherry Blue SkyOctober 29, 2013

    ABsoLUTEly beautiful!!!!!!!!!

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  21. GailOctober 31, 2013

    Beautifully written. "...ripples of hope..." I love that line.

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