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searching for signs among the rocks
drifting far from the wooden docks
watching waves break under my feet
catching the oceans rhythm and beat
whispering in the breeze my dreams
high floating clouds filtered sunbeams
my words melt in the mid-day heat
catching the oceans rhythm and beat
sparkling message, hidden from view
salted tears, my heart thinks of you
vast sea lost wandering souls meet
catching the oceans rhythm and beat
searching for signs among the rocks
catching the oceans rhythm and beat
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Author's note: I was on the coast
climbing some rocks and found
this hidden gift.
Trying my hand at a Kyrielle Sonnet
I like the idea of searching for/ finding signs. I think if we spend time in nature for a while the message will become more and more clear.
ReplyDeleteHi Mary,
DeleteYes, I think nature will speak to us and show us the way!
Very effective use of the form...the repetitions tie the stanzas together very effectively.
ReplyDeleteThank you Steve, this was a new sonnet form for me but, I was feeling the mood so decided to go with it.
DeleteSo lyrical.. keeping time with the rhythm of the sea..
ReplyDeleteCatching that beat can bring a sense of calmness.
DeleteWhen you search you shall find, such great flow as you searched for something one of a kind.
ReplyDeleteHi Pat,
DeleteI was quite surprised to find this rock and it brought a huge smile to my face. It is these unexpected gifts in life that make the journey amazing.
I absolutely LOVE this poem! It speaks such volumes regarding passion and longing. Especially adore "my heart thinks of you vast sea lost wandering souls meet catching the oceans rhythm and beat."
ReplyDeleteLots of love,
Sanaa
Thank you Sanaa, I felt passionate when I wrote it. I am glad the reader could feel my emotions.
Deleteyes...seeking makes us what we are today...
ReplyDeleteThat is very true Sumana..it is all the little things in the journey.
DeleteI see this both as a metaphor and as the fisherman's wife waiting at sea... lovely effect of the repetition.
ReplyDeleteBjorn, yes this could be interpreted in a few ways. I'll leave it up to you! Thanks for the visit.
DeleteWhat a wonderful and mystical message to find, painted on that rock. Glorious. I love the rhythm of this poem, love that you found a message.
ReplyDeleteHi Sherry,
DeleteI went to the coast and came across some great rocks and of course I had to explore and I am so delighted I did.
Such a beautifully melancholy sonnet.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kerry! I always enjoy reading your sonnets.
DeleteWhen you listen and get the beat I'm sure the world lifts up treasures - poetically and fossil-ly - especially when those tears sting and we need a little light and hope
ReplyDeleteThat is very true, treasures can be found in the most unexpected ways. It's as if the universe heard my cries.
DeleteI am glad it did
DeleteThanks :)
DeleteThe ocean is like a canvas for poetry!
ReplyDeleteThat it is! It just speaks to the heart.
DeleteOne of the most beautiful things to do is walk by the oceans shore and observe the sea alive, the birds flying overhead, the shifting sands and the message of the rocks and know true happiness. What a treat to visit you today.
ReplyDeleteYes, I do enjoy a walk along the shore too bad I don't live closer to the ocean.
DeleteWow! I too search for signs, but seldom with such conspicuous success. Lovely words - wonderful evocative and transcendent sea to sky images - replete with a splendid surprise.
ReplyDeleteHi Wendy, It was just one of those days when the universe has something to say.
DeleteLove the sounds, and the sentiment. And most of all, I adore that you shared your gift with us! ♥
ReplyDeleteI am glad you enjoyed my poem and adventure.
DeleteA beautiful poem and a wonderful gift. A very successful Kyrielle Sonnet. You make me want to try one too.
ReplyDeleteRosemary, you can try the sonnet and I'll try a ramble :)
DeleteThis is beautiful. Makes me want to visit the ocean, its rocks and search for signs. I'm not familiar with the form, but you certainly made it work.
ReplyDeleteHi Myrna,
DeleteI wasn't familiar with the form, but I thought it looked like a bit of fun.
beautiful and what a wonderful "find"
ReplyDeleteZQ
Thanks ZQ!
DeleteWhat a cool discovery. I wonder what it means?
ReplyDelete"My words melt in the mid-day heat" is such a wonderful line. But who needs words when you have that kind of scenery all around you?
That is true words weren't needed as I let nature speak and I listened.
DeleteA very beautiful poem. Thank you so much for sharing.
ReplyDeleteThank you and you are welcome!
Deletewhat an amazing find on the rock. i wonder what the artist is trying to tell. that he/she is happy? or warn about global warming?
ReplyDeletethat's a great sonnet. i love the cadence in the poem. :)
As, I looked at it I saw a couple of things ..the sun shines even in hard times, the light is always with you...perhaps, it is honoring the sun goddess...
Deletesometimes the messages don't need bottles, do they ... :)
ReplyDeleteThat is true - messages seem to just find a way to be seen or heard..floating at sea or between the waves and rocks...
Delete'signs among the rocks' sounds very intriguing....I like the riddle kind of traveling..Maybe this is one of them...
ReplyDeleteIt was quite the find! I was a bit awestruck..
DeleteHi human, Truedessa,
ReplyDeleteAnd a significant meaning etched in the rock. A thoughtful pawem, my human friend. See what you can reach...on the beach.
Pawsitive wishes,
Penny!
Hi Penny,
DeletePawsitive wishes to you as well!
Hi Truedessa - I love clambering over rocks and lingering as the sea weaves in and out ... seeing the pools and just cogitating the world at large, but far away as I wander the coast ... cheers Hilary
ReplyDeleteHi Hilary, It is fun to watch the water splash against the rocks.
DeleteHi Truedessa - I love clambering over rocks and lingering as the sea weaves in and out ... seeing the pools and just cogitating the world at large, but far away as I wander the coast ... cheers Hilary
ReplyDeleteTwice as nice - thanks again!
DeleteBeautiful! I love the mood of the piece. Truly beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThank you Crystal for visiting and the comment!
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