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stop behold the wonders of autumn
autumn, a time of changing views
views, in wondrous hues of color
color, brightens the journey ahead
ahead, a winding road leading up
up, narrow rocky trails dangerously steep
steep, climbing each step with a deep inhale
inhale, exhale the UN-polluted mountain air
air, crisp and clean the need to breathe
breathe, in moments before they are gone
gone, are the days when I traveled lost
lost are my dreams of yesterday, today I live
live, for today embracing glorious light
light, the source that guides the wanderer
wanderer, the one who seeks eyes of the dragon
dragon, guards the dreamers secret lair
lair, hidden sanctuary panoramic window
window, eyes of an oracle, feeling whole
whole, body, heart and soul inter-locking
inter-locking, jigsaw fitting together united
united, in effulgent light, the prism of life
life, the journey between here and there
there, the place of higher consciousness
consciousness, the state of being truly awake
awake, transcending dreams to a new reality
reality, perception translated in an autumn day
sharing with Poets United - Poetry Pantry 323
Thanks for visiting!
I love the flow of this - like a stream of thought - and light..
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting, I hope you are feeling better!
DeleteThe form is very good... and I do love the dragon here.
ReplyDeleteThanks Bjorn, Dragons seem to be on my mind.
DeleteCool how you linked everything together and brought it full circle.
ReplyDeleteThanks Alex, loop poetry intrigues me
DeleteExcellent use of form here.. makes me wanna go through it again and again ❤️ Lovely!!
ReplyDeleteSmiling, always nice when someone wants to read it again!
DeleteThis is glorious, I love the cascade of wonderful imagery down the page. Cool form, I must give it a try.
ReplyDeleteHi Sherry, I hope you do try the form. I'd like to see where it takes you. I sent you a note.
DeleteYes, better to live for today than to live in the past or future. We are all on a journey between here & there, but we can only appreciate fullest the place that exists in the 'now.'
ReplyDeleteTime is "now" so I need to live more in the now then be caught in some lofty dream that will never happen:(
DeleteLOVE this carefully constructed poetic jigsaw.
ReplyDeleteSmiling, a poetic jigsaw pieced together by a wandering mind. Thanks for visiting..
DeleteThank you! Autumn is in its peak, leaves are starting to fall quickly.
ReplyDeleteHave to keep the journey going, un-polluted mountain air is a fine breathe of fresh air too.
ReplyDeleteYes, the journey beckons onward no matter how high I must climb or how many times I must fall. I will stop and take in the view along the way and be reminded of the beauty of life.
DeleteI was caught in your flow.
ReplyDeleteBut isn't this the underlying nature of life...
Martin, I am glad you were caught in the flow
DeleteBut, perhaps you could elaborate on your comment???
What a wonderful form - it just tugs your readers along ... a happy race towards something glorious ... which is a wonderful way to take in: all that autumn offers.
ReplyDeleteWendy, I ever tire of reading your comments. You are a source of light!
Delete"Never"
DeleteVery interesting form..
ReplyDeleteIt is called loop poetry, I guess sometimes the lines loop in my mind and this gives me an outlet.
DeleteIt is an insistence that one has to be realistic. The 'now' is what matters most! Very much so True!
ReplyDeleteHank
I guess one has to be realistic, but that doesn't make the journey easier:)
DeleteIt's a jam-packed journey!
ReplyDeleteThanks Colleen, I saw that stop sign and just had to take a photo.
DeleteI like the way you took it deeper and deeper via the repetitions.
ReplyDeleteThanks Rosemary, looping it around like the curvy mountain road.
DeleteI dig how you pull it all together in that last line.
ReplyDeleteBrother Ollie, Glad you dug it...smiling..
Deleteinteresting form, and yes, it is like a poetic jig-saw. i like how the pieces of imagery formed, and yet somehow, they come together to form a picture of autumn. :)
ReplyDeletethis reminds me of a game we once played at a poetry forum, where a writer starts a line from the last word of the previous writer, in trying to write a coherent poem. we called it a chain poem, if i remembered correctly. it is not easy. :)
Hi dsnake1, thanks for sharing the interesting story about the poetry forum. A chain poem might be fun to try.
DeleteI'm new and did not know you rhyme too. I have to work on my lines. Great flow :)
ReplyDeleteHello, welcome and thanks for visiting
DeleteThanks for your visit and I've indeed missed your poems. Peace & Love always!
ReplyDeleteThank you! Peace & Love Always!
DeleteAlways glad to see a dragon popping up in a poem!
ReplyDeleteI do like dragons!
DeleteI am well when thought of by those like you ...
ReplyDeleteI am glad to see you here, now pick up that pen and write something amazing. :) you have been missed.
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