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| @picture by Mama Zen |
A warrior's song
wooden flute
beneath a full
face
mysterious moon
ancient drum
shadows of the
past
illuminated
wispy clouds
enchanted vision
author's' note: for the challenge I used the Kelly Lune - Three lines containing a syllabic count of 5-3-5 with a series of interlocking lunes.
Very atmospheric.
ReplyDeleteI agree..there is something about the universe that speaks.
DeleteI like the vision of the mysterious moon, amidst the flute & drums ~ I thought of a ritual or dance during full moon ~
ReplyDeleteI hope you enjoyed writing the lune poems ~
Thank you for participating in RT Sunday Challenge ~
Have a good week ~
Heaven,
DeleteThanks for the comment and yes, I did enjoy writing these.
To dance and prance under the moon
ReplyDeleteCould make one look like a loon
But ritual ways
Are all the craze
I'll give no attitude
If some want to dance around nude..LOL
Pat,
DeleteYou are always a fun cat
and I do like to chat
ah the mystic moon
makes my head swoon..
Very delicate poetic morsels for a midnight snack. The form suits you.
ReplyDeleteaprille,
DeleteThanks you so much for reading my work and the comment.
Cool poem!
ReplyDeleteayala,
DeleteThanks so much! Nice to see you here.
I enjoyed your lunes so much,,,the first is my favourite,,,,but all are special,,
ReplyDeleteEllecee,
DeleteThank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed my lunes. There is something mystical about a full moon.
I enjoyed these .... felt primitive and old world!
ReplyDeleteHelen,
DeleteThank you that is exactly what I was striving for the call of the ancient ones under a full moon. I enjoy studying ancient cultures and have a bit of history with the Iroquois.
This, the second stanza, especially, spoke to me. I pictured the ancient Haida warriors from northern islands off the coast of British Columbia, and the two words "ancient drum" cause an answering thrum in my bloodstream.
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Kay,
DeleteI am so pleased you enjoyed my lune..there is something mystical about ancient cultures and I often listen for that drum as it is the beating of my inner world. Peace...
Cool and great fun. Very enjoyable!
ReplyDeleteDave,
DeleteThanks so much! I am glad you enjoyed my poems.
Loredana,
ReplyDeleteThanks you so much!
Wonderful feeling of atmosphere in this--dark and mystical. Thanks for visiting my blog.
ReplyDeleteHi Peggy,
DeleteThanks for reading and it was my pleasure to visit your blog.
This poem really speaks to me. I feel such affinity with ancient cultures, who knew how to live upon - and with - the land. This poem is really beautiful!
ReplyDeleteSherry,
DeleteI am so glad my poem spoke to you as it spoke to me as well. I have a deep respect for ancient cultures. Thanks so much!
I love the second lune with its mysterious moon, ancient drum and shadows of the past. Saying so much more than the words themselves. I can feel the ancient beat through all three.
ReplyDeleteCarol,
DeleteI am grateful, that you could feel the beat of the ancient ones through my verse. Thank you!