Justin Timberlake - I've got soul but, I'm not a soldier
End of the World
Man, thinks he
holds the world
drifting through
life livin' on the edge
drink for the soul in an aluminum can
makin' a promise ,
a silent pledge
watch your back,
he's got a gun
from here to there
without a care
walkin' under a blazing sun
playin' the game
of life on a dare
arcade of
temptation, grab a token
ooh, that babe is
lookin' nice
body's talkin' no
words spoken
c' mon now give
me a slice
no boundaries,
what's right
soldiers playing
war call of duty
fighting the
battle for lost souls
chasing darkness,
seeking beauty
fallin' on drunken
knees, bruised
can someone buy me
another one
I've got a soul
but it's confused
singing a song
until the day is done
end of the world
not so amusing
salvation found in
an aluminum can
who will be
winning, who will be losing
I've got soul, but
I'm not a soldier..
I'm part of creation - man
Author's note: This was a prompt
THE CHALLENGE:
Watch the clip.
Write a poem inspired by it.
That's pretty much it.
Author's note: This was a prompt
THE CHALLENGE:
Watch the clip.
Write a poem inspired by it.
That's pretty much it.
Nice play on having soul, can sure take its toll and being part of it all, surely can be seen on your wall.
ReplyDeleteHi Pat,
DeleteNice to see you on my wall. A nice prompt so I had to see what could be done.
Oh yes, the world and salvation, both in an aluminum can. Well done!
ReplyDeleteK
Hi Kay,
DeleteThanks!
Good take on the prompt, strong rhyme and rhythm in this. I especially like your lines:
ReplyDeletefallin' on drunken knees, bruised
can someone buy me another one
I've got a soul but it's confused
singing a song until the day is done
Hi Mary,
DeleteThanks so much for the kind reply. I'm glad you enjoyed my take.
nice...really like your cadence in this...it comes across very lyrical with the rhyme and rhythm...a little bit of testosterone going on in this...smiles.
ReplyDeleteHi Brian,
DeleteThanks for the comment it was a bit of fun to write.
This is really good! Wonderful write!
ReplyDeleteCharles,
DeleteThanks for read and reply. Always nice!
what i like the most here is the stream of consciousness which you have captured. You built a depthful character and charged him with intensity. Well done and viva la
ReplyDeleteIsadora,
DeleteThank you so much for the kind assessment. I'm glad you stopped in to read.
Yes, indeed, sometimes the contents of that aluminum can make one think one is invincible indeed. Loved 'arcade of temptation' and 'salvation found in an aluminum can.' Well penned!
ReplyDeleteMary,
DeleteThanks for stopping by and the reply. The arcade of life always something happening.
To me this reads like the lyrics to a great song!
ReplyDeleteKerry,
DeleteThank you so much for feeling the lyrical side of the piece.
A different voice from you ~ Very nice and like Kerry, I thought it flows like a song ~
ReplyDeleteGrace,
DeleteThanks, this just flowed rather freely..nice to experiment with different textures.
chasing darkness, seeking beauty
ReplyDeletefallin' on drunken knees, bruised
A poetic story... too often true. Nicely done and like the attention to rhyme.
Margaret,
DeleteThank you so much for reading and the reply!