one lane ,
bittersweet passing place
pulling over, shoulder of life
stargazing in a world
of space
one lane,
bittersweet passing place
changing lanes two
lovers embrace
wandering souls float
free from strife
one lane,
bittersweet passing place
pulling over, shoulder
of life
written for the Mag 183
#1 for me
ReplyDeleteYippeeee
And such an embrace
Would make a heart race
One lane but a change
When another comes in range
Finding it to be bittersweet
Quite the treat
# 1 is alright by me
DeleteI'm smiling with glee
as I sip my herb tea
under a palm tree..
You moved to some place warm
DeleteNow there may be a **** storm
You did not tell me
How rude of thee lol
lol I did not move to a warmer place
Deletestill here stuck in this place..
Well written.
ReplyDeleteYour profile could run parallel to me.
Thank you Gail for the comment and the visit.
Deletereally like the repetition line...its got a cool rhythm to it...the lovers embrace and others floating free is cool too...
ReplyDeleteGood Afternoon Brian,
DeleteThanks for the nice comment..tempted a Triolet poem..lol..tricky one to do but, I like the outcome of the poem.
Nicely done
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteNicely penned...but I am wondering if it is not a little dangerous for two lovers to embrace right there! Smiles.
ReplyDeleteHi Mary,
DeletePerhaps, they like to live on the edge..happy birthday!
Driving & love....a exciting ride I say!
ReplyDeleteYes, I would agree..
Delete'Tis better to pass than crash--huh?
ReplyDeleteI have to agree with thee..
DeleteWonderful pic that one can imagine, together with the rhyming! Nicely Trudessa!
ReplyDeleteHank
Hank,
DeleteThanks so much my friend glad to see you here.
I like the rhythm of your poem. It read like a song. :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for the visit and lovely reply. I'm glad you could hear the music.
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