Monday, September 22, 2014

and Then the Rain Came



stormy clouds, then the rain came
on paper boats dreams floated away
messages from the heart  to claim
stormy clouds, then the rain came
flash of light, whispering your name
lost searching for hope in a new day
stormy clouds, then the rain came
on paper boats dreams floated away




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27 comments:

  1. Alex J. CavanaughSeptember 22, 2014

    So sad hope floated away...

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  2. GailSeptember 22, 2014

    '...on paper boats..." How very sad...but good.

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  3. Sherry Blue SkySeptember 22, 2014

    Beautifully sad, dreams floating away.......

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  4. Vandana SharmaSeptember 23, 2014

    To live without dreams is like being dead, very poignant write.

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 23, 2014

      That is very true..for dreams keep the soul alive..

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  5. Pat HattSeptember 23, 2014

    They float to bring new or rearrange the last few, have to use what we can indeed. That boat can turn into a paper crane and soar away.

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 23, 2014

      Ah, I like that a paper crane to guide the way to the pathway of dreams..

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  6. kaykualaSeptember 23, 2014

    Dreams can be dashed by little distractions. So true, Truedessa!

    Hank

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  7. NatašekSeptember 23, 2014

    love the structure that you used here.. it all flows peacefully in sadness.

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  8. 21 WitsSeptember 23, 2014

    Oh no not the rain, and why the paper boats today, oh my! I just enjoyed your prose, as it sails us through thoughts of our own, indeed.

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 23, 2014

      Hi Karen,

      When I saw the picture the words just seemed to flow..

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  9. Optimistic ExistentialistSeptember 23, 2014

    Very sad but also very beautiful...

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 23, 2014

      Sad and beautiful at the same time..but, there is always hope in a new day.

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  10. Stafford RaySeptember 23, 2014

    Unrealistic expectations,dreams that float away when the rains come so succinctly expressed. The repeated lines were effective, reinforcing the hopelessness.

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 23, 2014

      Thank you..I was trying to capture a feeling..

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  11. PirateGunnSeptember 24, 2014

    Fragile dreams floating..very nice

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  12. AnonymousSeptember 24, 2014

    I enjoyed the repetition you employed with this poem. Love the line, "on paper boats dreams floated away."

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    1. TruedessaSeptember 24, 2014

      It sad when dreams float away..thanks for reading..

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  13. Stacy M.S.September 25, 2014

    i always hate when the rain comes :/ unless its a cold, fall day and i'm cuddled up with my coffee and a good book!

    stacy lynn mar
    http://warningthestars.blogspot.com/

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  14. UnknownSeptember 25, 2014

    ethereal beauty, paper boats are floating around my heart.

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  15. Silent Otto September 25, 2014

    And so ended the age of Atlantis / Numenor ....looking into the future again i see !

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  16. Karishma ShettySeptember 28, 2014

    on paper boats dreams floated away

    That sense of transience is haunting!

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